Myths and legends fail to write
The hidden sense behind the night
Where I might find true sanctity
Away from those too frail to see
And this a place not known to man
Without cold law or harsh command
Yet while enclosed and far from home
None will wander there alone
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Rather good
I really liked that! especially the lines: -
"Where I might find true sanctity
Away from those too frail to see"
Funny how you're a nutter and a good poet!!! Borf!
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Wow...great flow...amazing how you express yourself..
We are never wondering alone...there will always be another poetic friend watching our steps and helping us through....together with our own words and thoughts...
Flowed sooooooooooooooooo well...
XXJeannette
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You know .. your short poems are marvelous in itself..
The beat is amazing in this as well as the words chosen - which the last lines made me tingle a lttle.
Only thing I noticed out of place was that in the fifth line, I stumbled - it has an extra syllable that stopped the flow for a while [and immediately picked up with the next line]
Other than that - it's been a long time since I stopped here. But then again, it's been a long time since I've been somewhat normal.
♥
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wow
This is such an emotion filled write and I think That you are verry talented!You should continue writing such magnificent poems!
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