Entrance to the conflagration
rise again my congregation.
Take my life and start sensation
watch the sulphur condensation.
Demons know the cause of madness
demons know the pain.
Rob the world of hope and gladness
for the corporal gain.
Fire burns inside the horror
fire burns it all.
Raining blood and brick and mortar
torrents it shall fall.
Envenomed with corruption
bleeding deep within.
Fulminate mere mortals,
submerging them in sin.
Obliterate and eliminate,
release the devastation.
Hear the screams of suffering,
embrace it in elation.
Embattle septic swords,
unleash with brutality.
Cleave pathetic shields,
harvest their fatality.
Chains will whip your hesitation
mind may feel it's altercation.
Take your life and know elation
endless time is the duration.
Satan know the cost of power
devil hears you scream.
Satan sees the final hour
devil needs a dream.
Flames may spark but from an ember
flames consume it all.
No one cares if you're a member
when your in a fall.
Within walls of putrid pain,
and flames of heated fire.
Steel plated visions light,
as martyrs lead the choir.
Sabre blades clash loudly,
impaled on bayonets force.
Dripping with pure disgust,
and showing no remorse.
Scavenging rancid flesh,
baying for damnation.
Picking bloody bones,
amongst annihilation.
Monster mashing mutilation
useless under undulation.
Comatose creates cremation
inside out into inflation.
Monsters know your thought and feeling
monsters know the hate!
Monster knows the skin is peeling
riots breaks the gate!
Masochist will sit and smile
flames consume it all.
We'll all be here for awhile
staying for the brawl.
Come my many children
fall into abyss.
Hope? the flame will wilt them
and the sin persists.
Tear down the barriers,
portals open wide.
Hope faith and happiness
are sinfully denied.
The devils on his throne,
commanding all power.
Infection now deep,
within the final hour.
Infiltrate and penetrate,
the mission is complete.
Walls of denial fall,
our conquest, your defeat.
Author notes
Thanks crow, was great to work with you 
I actually love this piece!
Well Jessica, I think you'll have your work cut out for you...lol So many 'ings' & 'tion's' 
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Stunning
I lurved this one.
It's going onto my favourites list.
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Thanks Glad you enjoyed!
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ninty one lines
To rhyme in check with thoughts to focus on a subject and attempt to be coherent to a reader in continuity with a co-writer in a difficult poem.
Too much misaligned infusion in the timed implosion.
Nano second thought delays misfires the atomic explosion.
Congrats.
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Geee how very dark and deep!
My word this is a very flesh tingling write for sure, the chill is still with me and I am looking right over my shoulder feeling a hell of a strong presence there! The ambiance in this penned to perfection Poet Laureate level poem is so strong and the vivid imagery so graphic that it is impossible to let it lie, it lingers on.
Wow love it well done fabulously chilling and strong read!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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it is i whom bow down to your dark pen and ask that you bestow some of that magic you have on me, keep it flowing and you both did amazing
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Holy Moly this is awesome!
You both did a fantastic job!
"Chains will whip your hesitation"
There's something about that line
that made me writhe...
Superb!!
~Pastel
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EEEP! Holy Heck that's dark!! Love the calling of the congregation to go and release hell on everyone!!!
A fab collaboration that I thought flowed wonderfully. Gave me a few shivers along the way
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The first thing I noticed wasn't the gerunds or the -tion words LoL...I did enjoy your AN. No, the first thing I noticed was your inconsistency in using periods & capitalizations.
Now, since you seem to use periods, I would probably suggest to capitalize only after a period.
"Entrance to the conflagration
Rise again my congregation <--why is this capitalized??
take my life and start sensation
watch the sulphur condensation <--since you use periods, there shuld be one here?
BTW, I LOVE the word 'sulphur' when I'm not smelling it. It can also be spelled 'sulfur', but I like it the 'ph' way.
Demons know the cause of madness
Demons know the pain<--why is this capitalized?
Rob the world of hope and gladness<--ditto about caps.
For the corporal gain<--ditto about caps.
Fire burns inside the horror<--ditto about caps.
Fire burns it all<--ditto about caps.
raining blood and brick and mortar
Torrents it shall fall.<--ditto about caps.
Envenomed with corruption
bleeding deep within.
Fulminate mere mortals,
submerging them in sin.
Okay, so the capitalizations are all cool here. I kind of ditched capitalizations & periods recently. 'fulminate', what a kick-ass word. And of course sins...
"Obliterate and eliminate,
release the devastation.
Hear the screams of suffering,
embrace it in elation."
Embracing pain & devastation?!!! I think not.
Dark poetry.
"Embattle septic swords,"<--I like the alliteration
unleash with brutality.
Cleave pathetic shields,
harvest their fatality."
"Chains will whip your hesitation
Mind may feel it's altercation<--why is this capitalized in the beginning of the line??
take your life and know elation
endless time is the duration<--there isn't a period, so you're using periods inconsistently
Satan know the cost of power
Devil hears you scream<--shouldn't be cap.
Satan sees the final hour<--shouldn't be cap.
devil needs a dream
Flames may spark but from an ember<--shouldn't be cap.
flames consume it all
No one cares if you're a member
when your in a fall.
Within walls of putrid pain,
and flames of heated fire.
Steel plated visions light,
as martyr's lead the choir.
martyr's==>martyrs
It's not a possessive form & you're talking about more than one
"Sabre <--did you mean 'saber'?? blades clash loudly,
impaled on bayonets force.
Dripping with pure disgust,
and showing no remorse."
"Monster mashing mutilation
Useless under undulation<--why is this cap.?
comatose creates cremation
Inside out into inflation"<--why is this cap.?
No periods
Monsters know your thought and feeling
Monsters know the hate!
Monster knows the skin is peeling
riots breaks the gate!
masochist will sit and smile<--should be capitalized?
flames consume it all<--a period?
We'll all be here for awhile
staying for the brawl.
"Come my many children"
Well this makes me think of J.S. Bach, who had 23 kids.
Fall into abyss
Hope? -->capitalized that-->the flame will wilt them.
and the sin persists.
I think my work here is done? LoL I hope I don't get flack for this comment.
Apart from the inconsistent capitalizations & periods, the dark tone of this piece is really prevalent & approachable.
-Jessica
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You would never get flack from me for a comment! I love yours Woe be tide anyone who trys to give you bother on one of mine!
Thanks hunni 
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