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blue

blue takes many shapes
the ocean
in the eyes of many
and yet
when i close my eyes
i see the sky
flying
seeing all that i cannot see
and more

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  • laurel
    September 14, 2008

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    i really enjoyed your phrasing in this piece.
    my favorite phrase was "i think the sky / flying . . .". this gave such a unique take on something that can so easily be overdone.
    thanks -
    laurel


  • etoile
    August 22, 2008

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    punctuation would make this flow better
    but this was a good take on the prompt.

    i think the sky
    flying
    seeing all that i cannot see
    and more
    ---
    that was a good ending. it made me think

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Very nice

    Have you ever just lay down on the ground and looked as though you could see beyond the sky to focus on it until it feels as though you are floating its an aswesome feeling indeed .Liked the muse