Plotted genocide
Erasing scribbling
from accountability,
claiming dyslexia
of rubber laws,
moulded to suit circumstances
like borders transgressed
in the name of peace.
Alterations pencilled
into affidavits,
a convention of convenience
temporarily blinded
in revenge.
Syllables slaughtered
with every droplet shed
upon the floor of freedom,
then like dust, swept away
by the harsh bristles of denial.
What good are words,
when hands block their meaning,
It’s so hard to speak
when you can not breathe.
Author notes
Option 2 : Pain
Although the Geneva Convention has saved many lifes I still think it means nothing more that words on paper to some
they pay lip service to its ideals while finding better ways to torture and kill. They try to play the card of using
the letter of the law instead of realising that it should be about compassion.
By removing POW's to a country that has not signed the GC, they feel that it doesn't apply anymore. I guess you know who I mean.
A contest entry
- Tour De Monde - Stage 5 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended September 12, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS THREE by Swan song.
2000 points, ended October 5, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique Requested
Comments
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Excellent poignant and powerful!!!!
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this was really intense through the whole piece.. just grabbed the readers attention and didn't let go til the end.. You did such a wonderful job!! well deserved of the gold I believe! thank you very much for sharing!
Angel
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Ahhh. Your writing is fluid and enjoyable, I particular think that your politically based ideas meld with life in a way that makes it striking yet realistic.
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wow. i commend your strength & honesty to tackle such a personal opinion on such a contradictory topic. this is written well, with great poetic device & jam packed with emotion & imagery. i'm amazed. fantastic, enlightening, and very eye opening!!
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congrats Bro
I knew it! Bro this is a well deserved gold. I am featuring this for ya, Sweetie cause you deserve it...I am so proud of you! Good luck in round 6!!!!!
Lynda
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Thank you sis, its good to see there are still some who have faith in me
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You have given a voice to the part of Geneva Convention that
lies buried within the promised intent truth hurts but you have
laid it out as it is. I am sure many will ponder within the words
you have written long after they leave the page.
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WOW....
I say this is mighty shiny Bro
I love your emotion mixed with poetic device here, sweetness...I love this...True fug-azi talent
Congrats on an amazing piece....!!!!!!!!!!
Sis Lynda
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I was going to pick out a stanza that I liked best - but I really couldn't pick between them
- I really like the beauty and imagery that you shroud this poem in, such a juxtaposition from the passion of your voice and the strength of your emotion - I wish you the best of luck in the contest! I love this poem - it is just so powerfully crafted 
Keep writing
Polly
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Pawns on the chessfield of paper diplomacy, told so well within your poem. The true thoughts of the Geneva Conventions are ignored so many times. An excellent theme to write about.
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Absolutely Amazing..
this is such an in your face and F*** You type of poem..calling out the ills of the GC and tying their hands so to speak..all the while spoon feeding them their poison with righteous justified anger..this just totally rocks..and your ending..makes it the piece de resistance..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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Your endng is to die for!
I think after reading your author's notes - the poem that I first saw as metaphorical takes a more literal approach and Ithink that "doubled the effect" [
] of the poem.
An amazing piece - although I can't see how you wonder at this height
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