This is a broken hearts parade,
nothing else to debate.
Its the end of everything,
no more melodies to sing.
Please stop the silence,
no more defiance.
I need some tender loving care,
from my other half of a pair.
Sadly i have none,
rejection has already begun.
Call this retribution if you want,
do you think i'm doing this for fun?
I'm so serious about this,
but now so freaking pissed.
Why won't you disagree?
So that i can be free?
You're just hurting me more,
my heart's getting so damn sore.
I can't take it already,
why don't you just murder me?
But for me, its no longer valid.
My heart isn't anymore a solid.
Its now just blood,
more than enough to cause a flood.
Author notes
Option 3. Love- right now I am in the process of working through hard times in a relationship with the love of my life, so write me poems with emotion behind them, whether its sadness, longing, compassion, or loss. make me feel your pain or joy.
A contest entry
- This is new for me...I'd like kids 10-15 to enter ONLY! by SmartBrick.
350 points, ended October 16, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options For Everyone!!!! And yes that includes you! by joleahe.
300 points, ended October 29, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thanks sis
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I reallyreally liked this. It was incredible & powerfully written. I love the whole "Broken Hearts Parade" thing. I can really picture something like that. hah. Amazing poem, deep & powerful. :] Keep it uppp, sister
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Thanks
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i loved it. you are a wonderful writer.
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Thank you
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Good Job
Well written, the emotion is spilling forth like a cup overflowing. It may have been short but the imprint it will leave on the readers is...bottomless, how one can fathom measuring the depth of this poem...is beyond me. Good write, and keep on writing.
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Thanks!!
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"I need some tender loving care,
from my other half of a pair."
What an impassioned plea...
Great line! quite wrenching...love the softness...
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