Glowing volcanic eruption
against a pitch night sky
I see reflected
beyond this coastal shore.
Red and yellow clouds
stretched along the horizon,
another blood and melted cheddar
sunset.
A contest entry
- QUICKIE - 15 entries! prompt inspired by etoile.
458 points, ended August 22, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I love constructive critism, please indulge.
Comments
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well
It seems to me a canvas is in order for you have painted uch a visual with your words. Short and special poet. Nicely done.
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Actually, as I keep explaining, the poem
ending was meant to be an amusing, different take on the usual lush description of a sunset. I thought blood and melted cheddar was funny, being the oppisite of the title. It doesn't sound like an appitizing meal.
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ooh the imagery was amazing and great take on the prompt!
Glowing volcanic eruption
against a pitch night sky
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i liked that a lot!
Red and yellow clouds
stretched along the horizon,
another blood and melted cheddar
sunset.
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i loved that! how 'red and yellow' became 'blood and melted chedder' i like the matching color thing
thanks for entering and goodluck
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thanks for the comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it. The
blood and cheddar was ment to be weird-funny.I don't usually think of lovely sunsets in that picturesque way.
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