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We Are The Night




Smoke rolls
in grey-white clouds
over gin-soaked tables
and past wide-eyed patrons
listening to the horn player
steppin’ up to solo.
The women drink gin
and the men swill whiskey,
each striking a
distinctive pose
like refugees from an
unwritten Fitzgerald story.
Cigarette holders
held at proper angles,
eye-liner and rouge
as heavy as the drummers beat.
The men
curse their starched collars
and grit their teeth
at the way the ladies
eye the horn player
with such unbridled lust.
These thin,
deathly serious boys;
young,
black men
with passion
flowing from their
instruments
are the love
and the hate
of the room.
Music so sublime,
so candy-apple sweet,
yet simmering
with vinegar,
spills into the
soul and washes
blue electric
over the heart.
This melody is intoxicating
as a woman’s naked body
and as full as a
rich man’s ego;
yet it knows no bounds.
Each song
is a new adventure;
as open as the western plains
and as colorful
as a Georgia swamp.

The piano player
plays left-hand blues
while the bass man
pulls his rhythm
from the down-side
of the Devil’s basement.
Smoke curls around
the  drummer’s thick,
angry mouth;
eyes half-closed
he holds the electricity
of the room tight
like Thor wielding
thunder in firm command.
The men at the bar
talk in low,
polished whispers
afraid to disturb the
river of sound
they are swimming in.
They might drown
if they speak to loudly
or, worse yet,
they might be
heard.
A dapper man
in tie and tails
leans in close to his
young ingénue
whose pale blue eyes
are fixed on the
thick, snake-like
outline in the
horn players slacks.
The man whispers,
but she does not hear;
and he knows
it’s not just the man
it is the vibration
running through the room;
the ground-swelling
orgasm that
speaks of
sex
and love
and nights without end;
it is the music
itself.
He draws heavily
on his cigar
and leans back
hoping that
she, like the pearls
that adorn her neck,
is still his.
At a nearby table
two women
exchange a smoky,
liquor-laced kiss
and gaze at each other
as if the band’s playing
had suddenly cleared
their clouded vision.

As the tune
sweeps upward,
the instruments join in
a symphonic surge
to lift the roof
away from the trembling
stone walls.
Sweat spills from the
piano players face
as if the dam
just broke open and all
his training and passion
could no longer be
contained.
All eyes
are on the stage;
as the women clasp hands
and the men hold
their collective breath.
The smoke is flushed
from the room;
forced out
by the music’s
growing lion’s roar.
The tempo builds
And the
voices
of brass,
string
and
taught
skins
calls
out
in
one,
long
crescendo…

We are the night!

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  • stef-witt gold member
    October 25

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    How on earth is it possible to WRITE the picture of a Jazz song so accurately?!! You're incredible!! I felt like I was there... swooning over musicians and sipping on Gin in the dark. Absolutely stunning.


  • Allyce May gold member
    September 27

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    I'll have a whiskey - screw gin!

    What a vibrant, colourful scene you've painted. It's amazing what good music can do, isn't it? You have portrayed the way that it takes hold and doesn't let go as it moves us. Another great write!

  • Depth gold member
    September 25

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    That is what I like about your poems. You remind me of a poet I knew once and wrote with. He wrote small cryptic passages of emotion... never long poetry.. but you both have this way of writing that is similar to a small extent.


  • Starswhispers silver member
    August 21

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    Oh my! speechless here for the rest of the night ...
    Wow wow wow this has taken me way back to Paris in the Jazz dens of the 13th district. Thank you.

  • Aries gold member
    June 27

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    Wonderful

    What can I add to the other comments I love this you have truly put us in the picture you have penned the images that come to the mind's eye
    terrific

  • A very vivid picture in deed but I think this poem would obeen better served if you had broken it into smaller stanzas. It is hard to keep the attention when they are so long. But that is just a suggestion. Thank you for sharing.


  • LoveGoneMad
    January 25

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    Wow

    A great write here. you paint such a deep vivid picture, flows great. - overall WOW! keep it up.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 21, 2008

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    The men at the bar
    talk in low,
    polished whispers
    afraid to disturb the
    river of sound
    they are swimming in.
    They might drown
    if they speak to loudly
    or, worse yet,
    they might be
    heard.


    Very vivid write! I felt as if I was there. ^^ While reading this part, I got a mental picture in my head of a man who could be the head a Mafia/Mob, going over plans with his goonies. Wow...great write!


  • januaryrain gold member
    October 16, 2008

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    This is great, I heard it, felt it, it was like I was there as I read this. Fantastic imagery, oh I can't wait for the book.
    Amazing write.


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    {Let me call you a poet}

    A complete image of art you've gave
    I like the characters and how they did behave

    Adorable is the music that you played in it

    So my friend I tell you that this poem is a hit...

    best luck and thank you for the entry...

     


  • sinner-
    August 22, 2008

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    The enticing effect of jazz, this was amazing, the music echoes from the scenery depicted. Good luck.


  • Suzianne
    August 22, 2008
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    Whew!

    That's the kind of poem that calls for a cool shower! Consider that high praise.


    • jazzcat gold member
      August 22, 2008
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      Thanks. I truly appreciate your comments.

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