My whole life
written in a book,
for all to see;
my hair-raising terrors,
nightmares that don’t end,
even when the last chapter is read.
Voluminous volumes of visions
bathed in betrayals,
muddied by mistakes,
poisonously penned by ink
dyed with enemy’s blood,
staining forever.
Lies, lavished by lovers
cast aside,
laid open like sores
festered with falsities,
now bluntly bound
in the history of fairy tales
told to gullible generations.
Author notes
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Just thoughts on that picture - you can't ALWAYS believe the fairy tales!...lolol
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 16 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended August 24, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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How did I miss this one?
Powerful penning, my friend....
Well done as usual!! It's that other side of you..the one I love so well..hehe
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Thank you so much islekine - so pleased you liked this 'dark' write.
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Great imagery, even if it's dark.
Wow, I couldn't live in a whole life of nightmares, an occasional one for me is more than enough!
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Thank you 'Freed by Mercy' - so glad you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'.
So many people live lives full of nightmares - such a shame.
best wishes
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I like the way you've successfully collected together and penned this, to describe a book of stories both perhaps valuable to pass on to others but also to make a spare copy, so it can be given a relieving Viking burial.
Great work!
Sol
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Thank you so much 'Sol' for reading and your lovely comment on 'poisonously penned' - I am pleased you enjoyed this.
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Voluminous volumes of visions
bathed in betrayals,
Love those two lines
Love the whole poem
Best wishes and well done on the HM
Julie
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Thank you so much Julie - so pleased you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'....just my somewhat strange thoughts on that lovely picture...lololol
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WOW!!! Gramma Groovey this is perfect.. that's right fairy tales aren't always real.. how does that saying go? what you see isn't always what you get
this is a very deep and thought provoking piece.. I love this entire poem... excellent job on both
good luck
kat
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Thank you kat - so pleased you liked this.
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I really love this
it reads like excerpts from
a diary, very intimate
written in your usual
soulfull style!!
Awesome!
~Pastel
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Thank you Pastel - so pleased you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'.
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No.. you cannot believe fairytales!! A dark and sad piece that shows the falsities we often discover in life! Excellent take!
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Thank you kiwi - glad you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'.
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Much to mull over in this toxic tale.
Much enjoyed, great luck to you dear poet.
Antonio
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Thank you so much Antonio - glad you enjoyed my 'toxic tale'...lol
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Ooo!! I really like this all the words especially the adjectives. It gives me the chills. I don't know what else to say. I really like the middle stanza. Great job!
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Thank you so much 'DyingSweetly' for stopping in and reading 'poisonously penned'. I appreciate it and am pleased you enjoyed it.
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Love the title hunni! Wicked! As usual your alliteration is perfect! Gorgeous poem, thanks for entering and good luck
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Thank you LadyD - glad to know you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'.
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Hello.
I checked that picture out, sheesh, I don't know what is wrong with your monitor for it looked all cute to me; I was expecting that book from 'The Evil Dead' or something, ahhaha, after reading your poem. But it is true you can't always believe fairy tales (apart from the one about Beast of course, ahhaha).
Anyway your write: Has some great alliteration, expressive, but the best thing is the insights it provides. I don't know you though, so I can't comment on how factual it is, and how much of yourself you saw in that picture. The lovers stanza is the most interesting; that page could be present in quite a few books, and is an insightful and honest description , sad state of affairs in a way.
Overall a well written piece. I wish you well in the contest.
My regards.
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LOLOL - thank you so much Ace - glad you at least thought it was well written.
I have no idea whose muse invaded my mind..
...the picture is cute...lol....that's just the thoughts I got - based on nothing in my life at all. It could just be my thoughts are tangled with a friends right now - her son just found out, after 4 yrs. of raising his son (after his wife took off) - that his son is not his!!! his fairy-tale life is now a nightmare as his x and child have left, leaving him with no rights at all (and the story she tells is so different from the truth) - so sad.....anyways....
'Evil Dead' - great movie for special effects! A little strange, though...lol.
My 'muse' tends to like the dark, and sees the dark side to most things. Maybe because I grew up watching all the old horror/sci-fi movies, and my sons all watched them plus all the 'Nightmare on Elm Street'-type movies....lolol.....who knows, but it is so far removed from the easy-going, clown of the classroom joker that I am, that most people just look at my dark writes in total shock! not being able to understand where they come from (could it be the books I read maybe? )
again, thanks
(edit - oh, the books? Dean Koontz, Stephen King types, murder mysteries)
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soooo deep yo i really loved this an the rhythm of the words grouped
Voluminous volumes of visions
bathed in betrayals,
muddied by mistakes,
poisonously penned by ink
Just love this part! do you really need "by ink?" i love the double word flows. anyway WTG this is awesome!
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Thank you so much 'Darkwell' - I'm pleased you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'.
lol - have to have 'by ink'....it connects to the rest of the thought and to the following lines:
'poisonously penned by ink
dyed with enemy’s blood,
staining forever.'
Thanks!
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A deeply touching write...one I can relate to on so many levels!
Lies, lavished by lovers
cast aside,
laid open like sores
festered with falsities,
now bluntly bound
in the history of fairy tales
told to gullible generations
How sadly true!!!
Best of luck in the contest!!!
Az
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Thank you Az - so pleased you enjoyed 'poisonously penned'....there are so many untruths printed in books, magazines, newspapers, court records, etc., etc., etc. - and yet they are taken as 'gospel truth'....I guess that's where these thoughts came from...lol...maybe I am watching too much of 'entertainment tonight'????...lololololol
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Well I think that you did a great job woth this thanks for sharing and goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love
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Thank you Starz - glad you enjoyed.
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Oh wow! I so can totally dig and relate to this piece here
. You did a wonderful job!
Best of luck in the contest
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Thank you so much 'Hekate' - so pleased you liked this. Maybe an 'unusual' slant on that picture, but that's what the 'muse' sent...lololol
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