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white rabbit
of imagination
sullied yet stoic
pleads innocence,
with nothing but
half-remembered
comforts of youth
trapped between the
covers of history
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hand of a spinner,
trying to conceal
threads of seduction
while sightless eyes
convey disdain
of childhood fancy.
but invisible strings
forever turn my head,
with helpless nostalgia
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Author notes
Inspiration: A beautiful picture that can be found at http://manips-of-artist2.deviantart.com/art/BOOK-OF-DREAMS-II-95569856
I couldn't help the reference to Alice - I read it in the contest description and it really stuck in my mind 
- the other reference in this poem is to Tilabel (which was always one of my favorite fairytales!)
A contest entry
- Pretty Picture Prompt # 16 by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended August 24, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive criticism is always welcome!
Comments
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LOL I'm glad it wasn't all in my head that this is Alice. All I could think after reading was following the rabbit down the hole and all over Wonderland...
Effective piece love
Sha
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Bandit appreciation!
Thank you for this fine contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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Speaking of weaving...you've woven the threads of this poem very neatly into the imagery of the picture prompt. Just as in the Wonderland stories, your words hold a certain mysterious quality and leaves the reader pondering...
Well done. Very much enjoyed reading this one.
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A fitting response to the target prompt picture, interesting use of words and imagery. The Alicesque thread runs through this write and makes it quite interesting. Well Done!
Write on my friend. 
Dennis
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well done, although I have trouble connecting it is a well written poem none the less.
May Earth Guide Your Feet.
DW
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I thought of the song "white Rabbit" as well while reading this poem. It was a great take on the picture, and has wonderful imagery. I enjoyed reading this piece...
Love & Light
Debbera
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Fine Write!
One pill makes you larger & the other makes you small...I'm thinking of a 'major rock hit' "White Rabbit" here from the 60's....This is a good piece for the pix prompt! Imaginary & fitting. It's put me in a dreamy state & now I'm ready to ! Hope you do well in the contest. I enjoyed reading this!
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You certainly posted a poser, I felt so sad as I saw the closed eyes of a child and the hands of a seducer, those last three lines, forever looking back. A beautiful and easy flow.
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You have presented some thought provoking notions with some very nice lines and phrases....I have read this through a few times and in reverse order of the stanzas ...dont ask why it just seemed right. Perhaps the theme of yesterdays, childhood and history keeping the reflection in my thoughts as I read. An excellent take on the prompt. Good luck in the contest.
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Cool take!!! I don't know the fairytale Tilabel but you've made me want to look it up! Really great take here!
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My brain feels as if it just went for a quick ride in a blender! Which fits the Alice/white rabbit theme you mention very well! Intriguing take on the picture. Stories we were told or read over and over in youth do tend to attach pleasant and comforting memories to themselves. They may even become a part, subconsciously, of ourselves.
So what might the rabbit [imagination] be guilty of?
"Hand of a spinner" could be the necessary labors of life, or a spinner of tales, or refer to one who is skilled, or the hand of a clock indicating time's passage...whatever it is, it is minded to conceal seductions incorporated into its work. Is it the spinner who has sightless eyes, or another individual? In either case, they "disdain...childhood[s] fancy."
The third stanza presents the author as helplessly nostalgic, probably posessing very sweet and happy memories connected with the fancy and fantasies of long-ago stories. The title, "Misguided," seems to indicate the point of view of the "sightless" rather than the white rabbit and the still imaginative (and still enjoying it!) author!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment I'm glad that you liked this poem and that you got so much out of it
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Certainly out of the box! Love the phrasing and imagery portrayed here. Excellent take! Thanks for entering and good luck
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