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Misunderstandings

 

 

Prince Charming's going to hold a ball
Will Cinders be the lucky miss?
Her book must answer Cinders' call
"But does my bum look big in this?"
   Romance today is rather tough
   You have to earn each special kiss
   A talking book is magic stuff
   But does her bum look big in this?
The rabbits sewed all night and day
While Cinders helped each ugly Sis
And now she wants the Prince to play
Will he look at her bum in this?
    Two pumpkins turned into a Rolls
    Another car would be remiss
    But never mind these lesser goals
    She thinks her bum looks big in this!
Prince Charming's going to hold a ball
Does Cinders' bum look big in this

 
The magic car is on its way
To fly her to her fate
Can she escape her life today
I hope she isn't late

Arriving at the castle door
She looks to check her dress
The first impression would be poor
If Cinders looked a mess


Prince Charming smiles to greet each guest
And Cinders shyly bites her thumb
She glances round at all the rest
Each girl has got a tiny bum
    Our heroine is in distress
    She knows that coming here was dumb
    Those rabbits made a dreadful dress
    It shows up Cinders' rounded bum
Prince Charming rushes to her side
And wonders why she's looking glum
"You really mustn't try to hide,
I think you have a gorgeous bum!"
    Prince Charming rushed to greet this guest
    He'll marry her just for her bum!

 

 

Author notes

http://manips-of-artist2.deviantart.com/art/BOOK-OF-DREAMS-II-95569856


I hope I got all the banned elements in

There are two modified Kyrielle sonnets (the repeat lines aren't accurate repeats)
Joined together with a couple of stanzas in ballad meter. I hope you like it, I saw the way she was standing and ...

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  • moonbumps silver member
    August 24, 2008

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    Well I've got big feet so that puts me right out the frame!!!!
    Bumpy xxx


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    There were no banned elements Just suggestions lol

    A great spin on Cinderella!! Very humourous! 3 people have seen the "is my bum big" or "do I look fat in this" in this picture which I didn't see at all.. but now can! lol

    Nicely done!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    An interesting tale you have woven here. Some nice imagery, great read. Thanks for entering and good luck


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Well done indeed, but doesnt look like a server to me
    then again your serving the best to your fans

    best of luck to you

    Love
    Passions


  • NeonRose
    August 22, 2008

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    What a hoot, Jeff! I would have entered my "An Old Story, Retold", if pre-writes had been allowed, and this is right up that alley! An adorable and amusing tale!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 22, 2008
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    Oh, not bad.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Kyrielle sonnets (modified) or not, they make for a bloody good read. This was real fun and I loved the fact that you took all the banned elements and used them in this fun poem.

    Good luck in the contest.

    Sue


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 22, 2008
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    Boffo

    This one's a keeper.
    Such fun.


  • Meme Wheeler
    August 22, 2008
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    I totally agree with the lady here Rebekah-Ann!!! I enjoyed the tale as well!!! Bravo


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    August 22, 2008

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    I LOVED THIS!!!! A total winner!!!!

    I giggled each time I read about her complex, How many times have I stood in front of the mirror and wished for bigger assets or smaller "other parts"...

    Modified to perfection and the purple shows royalty and envy and is the one thing in my mind at the moment

    SPLENDID!!!

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