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My Dearest

I crept between memories
forgetting forged fights
that flickered
dimming in pictures
puking utters;

  I want to go home
if the place ever exists.

Like a rocking chair
cherishing children climbing
   upon laps
so the mouth unlocks
releasing over told stories
of another time
unreal, like nightmares
where I wish I was never born.

Remaining on railroads
tap toeing nails
once sweated upon
as the blood misted in the air
an old memory
where the past dwindled;

Hammering to whistles
one bitten word to another
skin shriveling in the sun,
but to a deeper meaning
of different colors
you could find him buried
beside forgotten paths.

Light a candle in her eyes
as charred letters burned again
to third degrees of lust,
marriage found needs
not kisses under the moonlight
or hearts fluttering,
    but darling
he will pay the bills.

Down the street
I wave and wait
expecting heaven to call my name
before you come again
with train tickets
and my true feelings.

Swept away
cleaning your life once more
bones shatter
organs become misplaced
and blood drops like rain,
pitter-pattering like our kisses.

I’ll be waiting,
watching over you
you’ll see my essence
through the steam of travel
evaporating to the sky
where we made love

and promised,

               forever.

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 11, 2008
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    Beauty in sadness and lost hope in memories...this is wonderful, so emotional and lovely...very moving...
    " I want to go home
    if the place ever exists."
    This line hit home hard...I often use to wonder if that
    place did exist...believe me it does, just sometimes takes us forever to find it...
    Excellent work!
    mystic


  • Age of Rain
    September 11, 2008

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    I loved the imagery in this piece. Your deliberate word placement was nice, and the dark metaphoric tones were stunning. Best of luck!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Each stanza has created so many thoughts and emotions
    Dark, sad, lost in thoughts, lost love
    Nicely written hun
    Julie


  • stasis
    August 25, 2008

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    " I want to go home
    if the place ever exists."


    That line alone smacked me in the face. The last two nights at my house have felt like that and I can identify with that emotion too much. You truly have a way with words. This piece made my chest literally ache with every line, and your feelings really resonate on the page. Amazing.


  • nilav
    August 25, 2008
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    emotion flows with the smooth flow of words and many powerful expressions remain in the mind too...


  • carl dunford
    August 23, 2008
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    A very thought provoking poem I enjoyed reading it.
    best wishes Carl.

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