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. Grandma's Grave (revised)

My heart is aching

though years have past.

Looking at that stone

tears come falling fast.

 

You always loved flowers.

Here are some for you.

I miss you so much.

I don't know what to do.

 

Every year I visit

memories made recalled.

My heart sinks,

speech becomes drawled.

 

My only hope is

one day we'll meet again.

I come yearly to say

I miss you until then.

 

Author notes

the link to my first poem posted on AP
http://allpoetry.com/poem/1490280

This was very hard to rewrite since it was so painful and personal

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  • reveller silver member
    December 1
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    I never really had a grandma to speak of, it is so clear you cherished yours..it shines through in this heartfelt poem, beautifully penned.


  • Bev Hilderman gold member
    November 29
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    wow this is so powerful. I can tell that you love your grandmother a lot. sorry for your loss. keep the memories and enjoy them.


  • Lady Michaella
    January 16

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    wow
    this is really sad... i feel all the pain you feel here. written well, and i hope you feel better.
    from a distant friend, torn between battle.


  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    I thought this was a great write for/about your grandmother, and I'm sure a lot of people could relate to it. Very pretty but sad. Thanks for entering
    jeanette*~


  • InMyOwnGlassBox
    October 14, 2008

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    This is a very beautiful poem. I know the feeling of visiting a lost loved one. Your first one wasn't that bad. this revise really shored up some of the problems though. good luck!


  • Patpowers silver member
    September 14, 2008

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    Quite touching.

    I know it's not easy to write something like this. Quite sad I am sure. Thanks for presenting this work.


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    August 24, 2008
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    Memories are always great treasures of life.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    This is so beautiful hun!!

    I felt the sadness and the missing of your Grandma.. brought tears to my eyes!

  • stiljnxd
    August 21, 2008

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    Death is hard on those left behind. No matter how long we've had the person with us it's never easy to let them go.My grandmother will be 90 in a few weeks and I've almost lost her 4 times this summer. I know there must be a reason she's still around am I feel blessed for more time yet stay worried, wondering when? I am sorry for your loss.


  • LastWords
    August 21, 2008

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    The tears through the years will still flow
    to water her flowers and grow, as strong
    as your love, for the one up above
    the blessing you're addressing,
    tenderly touches my heart.


    Thank you for sharing a part of you, Poet



  • SilverWolf
    August 21, 2008
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    aww good revise!
    soo sad..

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