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Someone

I need someone,
someone that understands me.

My parents are clueless,
they don’t understand me.

For I had that someone,
that I could talk to,
but the lord took her away from me.

In May I thought the lord gave me someone new,
I could talk to her about everything,
but it was too good to be true.

She is now gone,
For she may not be dead,
But in my heart she is.

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It just doesn't seem right what do i need to change?

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  • SilverWolf
    April 26
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    well little miss if I dont get what I want I'll and hurt and step on and verbally kill whoever to get it the Lord does what he wants and you made it worse on yourself all you had to do was let go easy as pie and forget it all happened. people come in go and life you know.


  • Hikari Lady
    August 24, 2008

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    I understand you very well, it's so hard to know someone and then have to forget him/her it's like they died...
    You don't need to change anything in the poem though in your words I thought you can add more to express your emotions and such, in some places I felt the poem weak or just lack deeper expressing, but I could relate to it and it had a great effect on me.
    If you need to talk to anyone then you are free to message me, I've been through this and maybe I can help.


  • FaLlEn-AnGeL-101
    August 22, 2008

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    wow

    i kno wats it like losing ppl u held close adn then feelin as if the staranded ua dn having noone that understands.. that how my life is
    my parents think they kno wats goin on but they dont even kno the half of it

    good write

  • yellowflower61 gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    Very interesting

    Mystery, it takes ages to reach wisdom, still longer to pass it onto others. At your age the friendship is very fragile. You are asking "what do I need to change". Change your expectations that already now you will find an understanding, empathic soul. Look, but do not give. Be patient.

  • SilverWolf
    August 21, 2008

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    it isnt right because it isnt right. its not the poem its self kl its the story behind it. I didn't want to do this. I HAD too. you wanted me too to. dont stop talking to me. i want to know the path you choose in life. someday when i am out of the house i want to. but its all the same. its still running from the consequnces of life. it will be like now. but eaiser for nobody too know. i am sorry i ended our dreams. dont hate me. plz.

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