I fall to you
swollen, full
scattered thoughts in droplets
exposing consistencies
mixed with inconsistencies
never perfect— but ever submissive
keening for the gravity of your touch
Bursting, poised— acquiesced till round;
wingless, yet ever hopeful
plump with desire
rounded in nature
wholesome in truth;
I fall
Every part of me bared
before your winds
by soft wings of intuitiveness
mindful of necessitation;
sacrificial to your enchantment
elongated in anticipation—
raiment & pretence stripped;
limitations declared openly;
past, present & future— all
I fall naked unto your skin
A blanket of saturated buoyancy
no expectations— no needed concessions;
only me
Dripping flowing gentle water
soaking
in all of you that I touch
forever thirsting
the unquenchable arch
undeniably graced
by every thread of colour you choose to share
Pulled to your light
I begin to shine;
never too glossy
bent, pliable & eager
I fall for you
A contest entry
- Give me some LOVE by Ken-Maverick.
540 points, ended September 6, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh. This is a nice little poem that you have penned in here.
At first I was a little surprised by the way you were describing yourself but then I realized you were directly describing yourself as a rain drop and not your real features! How silly of me not to see it right away! lol It was fun and I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Humm..as desired by the prompt..you not only gave some love but as well shared the heart..well done..and thanks for sharing it...
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Ooh, nicely penned here my friend
Excellent imagery aswell,
Thanks for the entry
All the Best
Ken -
excellent
Every part of me bared
before your winds
by soft wings of intuitiveness
mindful of necessitation;
sacrificial to your enchantment
elongated in anticipation—
raiment & pretence stripped;
limitations declared openly;
past, present & future— all
I fall naked unto your skin
a good poem from all angles. do vist my poetrya nd offer comments. -
I really like the imagery of the rain and how you develop it. Your style and the flow of this piece work well together. Great job.
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impressive
can't say much more than that, and good luck ...
that's all I got...
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Beautiful; an instant favourite. Rain is a common muse for me.
Love the metaphor, you can read the poem twice and get two entirely different ideas.
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thank you
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This was a very interesting write.. beautifully crafted I think the flow was really nice and the imagery was vivid and detailed! bravo! thank you very much for sharing!! best of luck!
Angel
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thank you for your kind comments,
they are very much appreciated,
best to you always, Kj
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o.o jhi.kl.gy.fkpj!!
This is another of your writes that leaves me feeling... quite inadequate and at a loss for words. As though I should, once again, leave comments to those able to articulate in ways worthy of your lines.
(this is beautiful)
~Kristy
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hrmmm...
thank you
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