The falling leaves in autumn are a beauty to behold,
carpeting the woodland floor, in unique shades of red and gold.
The sun’s rays complement them streaming though the unclad trees,
whilst the pleasant scent of burning brair decendant on the breeze.
A squirrel darting to and fro flicking its fluffy tail,
searching through the leaves for acorns oft to no avail..
A blackbird hops along the margins head cocked on one side,
listening ,seeking hapless worms who have no chance to hide.
Pigeons flutter aimlessly seeking discarded scraps of bread,
whilst ruddy cheeked anglers fish from a nearby river bed..
Small children armed with nets and jam jars shouting out with glee,
surveying each other’s catches claiming success excitedly.
But as the autumn leaves begin to fade and then to decompose,
they become the next year’s compost without which no flower grows.
That’s the way that nature works all just comes and goes,
nothing remains constant as every philosopher knows.
Author notes
JUDMC
A contest entry
- Write me something that will touch my heart and soul in some way by Loveandblessings2u.
2000 points, ended September 5, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 'Images From Around the World' by Cynthia Gaines.
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Very beautiful imagery. This made me smile. The rhyming is wonderfully executed. Thanks so much for entering and best wishes.
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I do not have time to make lengthy comments, but let me say this is beautiful and the rhyme is superb.Thank you for entering
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nicely done
This is so nice,so pretty. The rhyme is easy,so natural,the whole piece works so well,all words fit and compliment each other marvelously and the piece fits the brief so superbly.I appriciate your entry and wish you well in my contest,and also with any others you enter. -
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cazzy71
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" so glad you liked it .....Best Wishes...George....
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Firstly, congrats on previous two HM's.
You rhymes keep this flow nice and the background fills this page with life; which you also accompany with the beautiful imagery within your piece. I love the strangeness of this piece, in strangeness, I say just how little people write on the small things and create them anew. Well done. -
such a fun poem to read. I like the imagery of the squirrel with it's fluffy tail. We recently went to the mountains and saw some of the biggest, fluffiest grey
squirrels I have ever seen! Like I said, this is a delight to read with all of the fun imagery. The only thing I miss is I would like to see an autumn border ...
couldn't find one? anyway, thank you for entering the contest.
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Poets Whisper
Many Thanks for your kind comments on my Autumn poems I have changed the border of "Autumn Leaves" in accordance with your wish.I hope you like it
Best Wishes ....George.....
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This is very beautifully written. I like the way you describe the autumn leaves. I could picture their life and death. I enjoyed the read!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Love it!!
Very nice indeed! I Love the way you make autumn not only beautiful but useful as well by adding the compost that helps make the flowers for next year...its amazing how the seasons work together, if only we as people would take notes....thanks for entering and good luck!
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Thank you for your beautifully composed entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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A very lovely Autumn poem.
It was a pleasure to read.
Very well done.
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Jesaan
Many thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" so glad you liked it.Best Wishes George
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Hi. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck! I’ve decided to use a slightly edited version of my friend Arkbear’s grading scoreboard to help me judge this contest. I hope he doesn’t mind. It’ll aid me in organizing my thoughts and judging fairly versus randomly. I hope you enjoy it and find it helpful. Writers with the highest possible points out of 80 will obviously win
Title Appeal: 8.5 – Befitting of this vivid seasonal poem, but gives away a lot about the contents. I would only click on this if I were in the mood to read this genre. Perhaps something more enticing?
Poem Flow: 8.75 – Rhyming long sentences is very challenging, and you did well, but the rhythm is off in many places, which made for a bumpy read.
Depth: 9.25 – Awesome depth! Your imagery is rich and packs a punch.
Emotional Impact: 8.5 – Brought back childhood memories, which was nice, but I didn’t connect with this piece on a deep level.
Spelling and Grammar: 9.25 – You did well here. Just one picky little thing. “All” is plural, thus “all just comes and goes” really should be “all just come and go.”
Punctuation and Caps: 9 – Missing quite a bit of internal punctuation needed to slow the reader down during the reading of this piece. Also, “..” at the end of lines is often better dropped for just a period.
Presentation: 9.5 – Nice presentation, just a few long lines that stick out, which also contributed to you meter problem.
Personal Appeal: 8.5 – I loved the imagery in this. I can still hear the children laughing. Nice job!
My score: 71.25/80.00
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This is absolutly beautiful and it is wonderfully written. Love the nature in and of tis poem. It was a pleasure to read.
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im really sorry. this is a tag contest, it wasnt for poems. sorry
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Thankyou for the entry
keep writing
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Thankyou for the entry
keep writing
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Lovely write and imagery in this piece...well done...thank you for entering and good luck
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Wonderful imagery is shared here, for a beautiful Autumn season. Very nice rhyme and rhythm in this write. Nice job, and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty
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You've done a great job with this poem... the flow is wonderful, just as the rhyming you've used... and I definitely like the imagery you captured within your words!thank you for the entry
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This is a very well written. It flows well and has a lot of meaning to it. I also find the background enjoyable. I Like dragons. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering into my contest.
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Very well done
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refreshing.
very nice job.. nice flow and you did a great job at painting a picture of fall. bravo.
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Beautiful
Wow such a touching peice. I loved it, of course Autumn is one of my favorite seasons, followed closely by Spring.
Thank you for sharing.
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This is certainly very interesting. I did say no prewrites in the rules, but I'll let this slide because I forgot to click the no prewrites box. Thanks for entering, though.
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Dragon BACKGROUND---> NICE VERY NICE
Subject---> i LOVE FALL
Poem---> I like the rhymeing. You really catch the nature of it. The way you express nature here is beautiful! Good write and good luck in my contest -
fab poem on autumn
nice picture ya ave shown
thanx 4 yr grt entry gd luck 2 ya
cheers abe
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this is a great vivid poem. thanks for the entry and best of luck!
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I loved the final stanza because it delineates the cycle of life. "For every time there is a seaon." I enjoyed reading this beautiful verse but I must disqualify it from our Titles R Us contest because it is for members only. If you would like to join our group and be inspired by our group titles, here is the link:
http://allpoetry.com/group/show/Titles%20Are%20Us.
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CitrineSunrise
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" I am sorry I didnt notice the members only clause.The link you gave me was unobtainable (3 times)in any event Thanks for taking the time to make such a nice comment. SilverScent D.Qed my "You're Beautiful" poem
on the grounds it was "cliched" She could learn a lot from you,
Best Wishes and Kindest Regards George ++++
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I enjoyed
the mind's journey through this poem. The rhyme is 'soft', and the images one can associate with. I can feel the breez, smell the decaying leaves, see the flashing tail of the squirrel and aslo experience the soberness of nature. You could have written this poem - given the title - in so many ways, but I enjoyed your approach. While it touches of fantacy, it also gives opportunity for 'learning', and best of all I enjoyed the way in which I could 'see' through your senses. You also leave opportunity for the reader to have his/her own thoughts. Thank you for this entry. Frans
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FransB
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" so glad you like it Best Wishes from your 83 year old friend George!!!
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HEHEHE i liked it very very much. thanks for entering it in my contest
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Sorry, but this contest is not for rhyming poems.
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Thank you for entering your poem in my contest, "New Beginnings." This isn't exactly what I was looking for in the new career path I chose, but I appreciate your taking the time to write such a beautifully inspiring poem of autumn leaves and change in the world around us. I wish the best of luck to you in all you do. Peace, Cyn
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Cynthia Gaines
Many Thanks for your kind and considerate comments on "Autumn Leaves"even though it wasn't what you wanted, you had the decency to make appreciative and kind comments unlike others whom I won't name Best Wishes and Kindest Regards George ++++
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I'd like to thank you for taking the time to enter my contest, 'Images From Around the World' with your beautifully thought-provoking poetry! Judging will be done soon, and I wish the best of luck to you!! Thanks again, and have a great day!!! Take care, Cyn
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vampireblood
Many Thanks for your kind comments on"Little Girl" much appreciated
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Cynthia Gaines
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" very much appreciated glad you liked it Best Wishes and Kindest Regards George
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Very nice take on the season. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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i don't always enjoy rhyming poetry,
but this worked really well.
the imagery is great!
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Just reading for a second time.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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This is absolutely beautiful!!! Not quite what I was looking for this contest, but superb nonetheless. Your imagery is simply captivating, I swear I could smeel autumn on the air (even though it's spring here in South Africa). Your creation flows so easily, and I love the rhyme. Thank you so much for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
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Luckintheshadows
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves"
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it.I'm sorry it didn't fit in the contest.My"Autumn" and "Autumn Days of Fun" might have been a better choice? Best Wishes and Kindest Regards
George ++++
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This is truly very lovely,
My favorite part is the ending.
" That’s the way that nature works all just comes and goes,
nothing remains constant as every philosopher knows. "
How true are those lines.
Just really wonderful writing.
Good luck in the contest
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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JM kenyon
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Near Death Experience" re philosophy relevence.There are two main
philosophies "Materialism and"Idealism", the separation of
the Soul from the Body is the main tenet of "Idealism"
Materialists believe they are inseparable.Best Wishes"Jenie
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November-Dani
Many Thanks for your kind comments on "Little Girl" Dani
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Loveandblessings2u
Many thanks for your kind comments on "Autumn Leaves" Joyce
so glad you liked it.Best Wishes and Kind Regards George + +++
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