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Adão e Eva

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Adão e Eva

It spoke to me, that piece of art;
a stroll through the gall'ry that day.
Image of man and counterpart,
a painting that swept me away.

Woman from man and man from dust;
blessed by God to love and obey,
companionship that we can trust;
a painting that swept me away.

To bask in the essence of one,
as the angels dance in ballet,
human existence has begun;
a painting that swept me away.

It spoke to me, that piece of art,
a painting that swept me away.

 



 

Author notes

Kyrielle Sonnet:

A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:
AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB

Art Work by: William Blake - 'Watching the Caresses of Adam and Eve'

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  • Tirrell
    September 11, 2008

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    Your sonnet here has swept me away, this is a beautiful poem, and wonderful kyrielle-sonnet
    It lends a most peaceful feeling.


  • daviscth silver member
    August 25, 2008
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    Thank you for the pleasure of reading this poem. I love the imagery as well as the picture.


  • Lola Green
    August 25, 2008

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    The Kyrielle Sonnet is such a gracefull style and compliments your thoughts in writing as well as the picture.

    I think this piece is done with a different outlook being you looking at the painting, which is exactly what you are doing! Clever and I loved the meter and rhyme for it flows beautifully!

    Now, I would like to thank you VERY MUCH for taking part in my contest and I also hope you had some fun with this!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 22, 2008

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    And your poem speaks to me and sweeps me away with your talent! This reads softly and beautiful! Tells the tale of the creation of man and woman in a lovely way!



  • myrataal silver member
    August 22, 2008

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    Ah Amera ...

    How I love the softness of the repetition of this Kyrielle Sonnet of yours ... It leaves me in awe. You have a mesmerizing way in pulling the reading into your very soul, in swirls of words and pictures softly stirred.

    Thank you.

    Love
    Myra


  • Faeryn
    August 21, 2008

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    This picture really fits the poem! I'm taking AP Art History and the colours, the lines, and the shapes all match wth the lovely perfection which is your poem. Such fantastc imagery and feeling in this. I love the third stanza, it's my favorite.
    Love,
    Tay


  • paulcreates silver member
    August 21, 2008
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    Very nice rhyme here Amera.

    Paul


  • Age of Rain
    August 21, 2008

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    (What a gorgeous pic!) 'gall'ry' that day' Love how you shortened the syllables in gallery.

    'angels dance in ballet' I am in love with that image.


    Your ending was absolutely perfect! Wonderful Kyrielle! *notes the correct form this time*


  • And Hyetal
    August 21, 2008

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    ohhh beautiful writing here. I love how you wrote about what impression the painting had on you. It makes me feel like I'm standing there looking at it, too.

    You know a lot about art.



    ~Cassie


  • Redeemed15
    August 21, 2008

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    Amera, I love you face image! Great work of art! (your poem) I love it! Great take on the contest's picture prompt!


  • PerVirtuous
    August 21, 2008

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    The sonnet and the painting are both works of art. I know how much harder it is to write 8 syllable sonnets. You have managed to capture the feeling of the painting extremely well and made the language completely conversational and normal. Wow, that is not easy to do. A powerful work that should do well in the contest. Hers's three bunnies for you.


  • StarEyes
    August 21, 2008

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    As always, a beautiful read that sweeps one away, with excellent story telling abilities! What a beautiful job you did on this one!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Rovingone gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    Well, Kryielle sonnets certainly suit you well! You used this one to tell a story perfectly. Adam and Eve would be quite proud. The picture was truly one that would sweep someone away.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    You excel at Kyrielle sonnets (well all sonnets) at writing paintings and you are inordinately fond of the creation story.
    All in all a marriage made in heaven, great stuff

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