Listen to her
talking about him
like he is a god
but she can't even tell him
how she feels about him...
I guess it's understandable
society telling us
guys make the first move
not the girls...
Which if you really
get down to it
if girls ARE more emotional...
Rejection
could be too painful...
I hear her talk about him
as if he can do no wrong
as if he is the one and only
perfect
person in the world...
and with hopes like that...
Who would want one of us
to ruin that for her?
Whereas we men
don't set our hopes so high
and don't have to buy
boxes upon boxes of kleenex
and eat a bucket
of chocolate chip cookie dough
to deal with
unreturned feelings...
I, for one
would not like to be the guy
whose number she tried to dial
ten, twenty, thirty times
only to hear the words,
"Uh...I'm sorry, I don't feel the same"
I, for one
would not like to be the guy
who she thought was perfect
until those words came out...
And I would not
under any circumstances
want to be the one
to make her cry...
all because she went with a
what if...?
Author notes
I'm writing about the second option...It's not very good, but at least i gave it a shot...I mean, yeah, maybe we are more emotional and open...but that only means we are more vulnerable and easily damaged...
anyway, just my thoughts on it...and I hope it's fine...
kayla*
Written January 16th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Role reversal by riley.
666 points, ended January 17, 2004, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Great poem from the other side's point of view . But maybe , just maybe that would be jeaulousy speaking because they are not the ones who have been picked eh? So for the future my advice is still the same ...if you want something bad enough , go after it . Rejection is part of the growing up process and even then we face many of them , be that by a guy , a turn down for a job , not winning a competition etc....you did a great job with this and I will give you some well deserved applause
much love ,
Reenie
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I love this, Kayla, but I have never had this problem. I don't believe in wasting a lot of time (Or else I am just impatient) and I have made the first move probably 60% of the time... my husband was so shy, if I had waited for him to make the first move, I would still be waiting... LOL
It is written so well, though, hun, I really like it.
Excellent job at looking through the other point of view.
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Not very good
Kayal my little sister
This is most excellent
Sometimes its hard on us girls
But then I have never really at it from a guys perspective either
I suppose also its the situation a person finds them self in also
I think you captured it quite nicely sis
Giving you a worthy applause on this one
Now you must come by and see mine too when you can
Luv and hugs
Susan~~~~~
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I really like this. I don't know why just now. it's sad but true that this happens. I wish it wasn't so. best of luck
~blond chick -
Hey there Kayla!! I like this poem a lot!!!!!!!! It is really great, and I think you really did put your heart and soul into this one. You know what I don't understand? How people can say they "love" a person, or whatever, and yet they are too shy to even say a word to them. How are things ever going to get any deeper if you can't even say a word to them?!
And in case if you are wondering, I am not at all meaning that in any way about you. You said somewhere in your poem that rejection might just be too painful, and that just made me think a bit...Love is all about taking risks they say!! lol
Anyways, yes, I am glad I am a girl because in society, men always make the first move, which is nice because I bet I would never have the courage to do that!!! lol
That was great Kayla!!!
Christine
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"Whereas we men
don't set our hopes so high"
Says who? Heh, I've done that before, it's always a setup for disaster. While I may not drown my sorrow in chocolate, I do manage to depress myself quite well sometimes.
Any way, I'm glad you wrote for this option. No one else has and I guess I can't blame them - this one is probably the hardest to write for. This is definitely what I was looking for.
And as for your author's comment about how being more emotional only makes women more vulnerable easily damaged, I suppose you have a good point. I didn't think about it from that perspective before.
Good poem and thanks for entering. This contest is looking like it will be a hard one to judge. -
holy... fff.. woooa... gg...
wooooooow........(exhales)
I assume this is from "Bob's" perspective? and that would make the what if at the end be like a sudden realisation, and just wow, that is amazing ly awesome. I like the point of veiw, it is 2nd person I think? I like the bucket of ice cream reference. it takes one to know one eh? it blows my mind. By the way, I'm sorry I haven't been reading or commenting on your poems for months and months, but I think I'm back now. I was reading some of my old ones and was like, " I wrote that? wow!" so there we go hey? the new backgroud and layout is very pleasing.
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