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Late at Night: she calls around to tell me stories

 

 

sat with Angeline last night

on the lost ship called my 'bed'

the linen strangled our legs and shores; alike

& pillows became cradles for heads and life-jackets


 

she came to whip my arse

a rescue remedy, she called it

told me to get a grip, serious

issues of life plague my temprement


 

we: don't do pity parties any more

my muse and me, and 'others' who want to come by

to see - my heart is beating in directions anew


 

freshly charged made amends

with the rest of my body

dipped in sugarless candy and forgotten fucks


 

                                                         save our souls

                                                         save our souls


 

if  I was a catholic I'd ask the priest for confession

just to add up the numbers on this imaginary rosary


 

not that me and Angeline don't pray

faith stands in the middle of the road

chirps out with the magpies and swallows

that crash under flailing ribs

wash the shoreline of my belly

and liver, salted on the rise of my hips


 

I prayed to the light

and to the greater sky

mother of the earth guided me

and the father of my night and day

called through the clouds


 

                                        - Angeline whistled old soul songs in my ear

 

when she visits

she sways in ghostly

like the Marie Celeste

drifts inside dreams

she covers my body

with the duvet


 

hushes me to sleep

she is a sonambulistic muse that creeps

under your skin, keeps alive your heart

if you let her


 

I used to smoke

I used to drink

I used to smoke & drink

and dance the hoochie coo!

 


 

 

 

 

 

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Last stanza is from the song Saved by Laverne Baker - a good old R&B number

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    A heartfelt take on the status of the muse and the reality of the life is crafted with a wonderful pen of your soul..well done..

  • celadia
    August 26, 2008

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    I love the story in the piece and the way you portray your relationship. It makes it seem special to me.


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    August 22, 2008

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    Bach flowers are a staple of my emotional well being...
    loved the line with rescue remedy!!!
    i always love your journeys

    I thrive on crab apple-- rather sad really


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 23, 2008
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      i have a bottle of rescue remedy in my make-up bag... it goes where i go!!
      and thank you Heidi, for your support and love


  • DogFish silver member
    August 22, 2008

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    "not that me and Angeline don't pray"...I don't know what Thomas Cranmer would think of it; but this almost sounds like a prayer.

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 22, 2008

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    This may be your best yet, at the very least, of your Angeline series.

    You do reflection and introspection so well... and this has the ebb and tide of waves crashing to the shore..washing away worries until finally .. 'used to' .. becomes less painful.

    Yes, beating in a new direction
    Sighing new hope into tomorrow
    Relying on self -- starting over

    &

    You should be very proud of yourself.

    This is beautiful writing from a beautiful woman.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 22, 2008
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      thank you lovely lady... and i am becoming more proud of myself as each new turn comes around.. and so should you


  • Lucy.
    August 21, 2008

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    Woohoo!! Love it. Second stanza...brilliant!

    Love you

    x

  • Rowan gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    and your poetry still dances the hoochie-coo, hon!
    Loved this stanza;
    "not that me and Angeline don't pray

    faith stands in the middle of the road..."
    perfect.
    Amazing work.


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    I'm so happy to see Angeline back because I know this is the "old" Gilly surfacing here. Beautiful as always, beautiful and gutsy like you.



    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 22, 2008
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      well, she never left really... she just had a little hiatus holiday


      thank you my dear friend


      • Suzanne Dia
        August 22, 2008
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        not quite the old Gill ..or Angeline, even
        I hear a different voice here -- it seems to long for something more

        this voice
        this heart
        this soul

        isn't settling for anything less than the best.


        • NurseChilly gold member
          August 22, 2008
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          you're so astute and disturbingly so at times, it makes me grin ..... wide ..... damn you!!! you know me so well..

          this heart is beating
          this love is growing
          this soul flies across the skies
          this is the voice of us
          this is the sound of woman


  • misselaineous
    August 21, 2008
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  • Oleander
    August 21, 2008
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    Loved it, beautiful. I felt you were talking about a real life friend, or someone you knew.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      it is about real life, as it's about me!!! lolol.. sorry to say


  • EvilKate
    August 21, 2008
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    Oh and thank you - for so eloquently reminding me how pity-parties solve nothing. Starting to slip myself - so a well timed kick that is well appreciated


  • EvilKate
    August 21, 2008

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    Bookmarked that I might read when more awake, to comment in a manner worthy of such wonder.

    Loved it sis


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    August 21, 2008

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    It seems 'priest' or none, that you conduct your own journey admirably... is that connected with 'admiral', sorry just noticed that.
    I muchly like this, especially the imagery in the first stanza the second line of which has a perfection about it which I love!!!
    Also the intimate privacy of real prayer, in the immediacy of our own soul from wherever we find ourselves, so much more accessibly real than the imageries of formal and often dressed up imitation with hearts left behind or only partially present.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      thank you my friend.. so glad i can call upon you to help me see things .. and the way we heal is important .. yes!!


  • Cannonsfire
    August 21, 2008

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    I've thought on many occasions I should give mine a name but the only one that keeps bobbing up is Eve lol the many faces of and I choose to ignore it or suffer the consequences lol I can't afford therapy. Yours on the other hand is one I could carouse with and live to tell the next day Love, Chez


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      oohhh i think you should name her/it/the thing.. lololol... would be so good to see


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 21, 2008

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    you know..
    I've never had a muse..
    I've always wondered what it was like to have one, especially one as feisty as Angeline..

    I have a feeling I'd be whipped into shape in more than one way
    and well .. all the things you used to do ..were only a part of everything that still makes you you.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      i think your muse is the sky and the earth and the way you see things


      • ArtFullyMe gold member
        August 21, 2008
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        actually, my muse if I had to name it is humanity, the sky and earth are merely things all can see.


  • apples fell
    August 21, 2008

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    This is just wonderful writing...Which further proves to me why you were invited to this contest, in the first place. The "not that me" stanza was just hard hitting for me and the imagery there was dead on. This is delicate at all the right times and still very much jagged...Like there are so many things left unanswered, between the way the air swishes back and forth and the heart, which can feel so much...Even when it seems to change, or grow out of our chests. I have seen Angeline appear in your poetry in the past and I think that character development mirroring the imagery of yourself, was simply awe inspiring. I have read this twice now and found nothing to critique. I think it's just strong atmospheric writing and very intense. You can see each image, like you are there, and that quality of the work is efficient and absolute.
    I really thought this was a strong showing Gillian.

    Thanks so much for the entry and good luck.

    ;


  • iverbthenoun
    August 21, 2008

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    you could still dance... but i am sure what a hoochie coo is... but i would love to see it... this is so personal and poetically beautiful. i loved the repitition of 'save our souls'.... i loved the way you showed that your heart is "anew" and the metion of the birds and the unsung ship... lovely...i love you, my she-woman!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 21, 2008
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      oohh i will and still do... but i wont be getting too stressed now for sure..
      all is good.. and i love you too my little shining star

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