Kissing shadows
of orange and red,
curved soft whispers
of fluttered wings,
stay still here.
Author notes
picture C
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 15 Words XXXVI - by Desire.
700 points, ended August 27, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? How can I improve? What was your least favorite part? Your favorite?
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Butterfly
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: Kissing shadows- Wonderful way to start this piece and for some reason while reading those two words- I kept seeing two hands- as if doing shadow puppets- but I am seeing the shadow on the wall images- also while reading part- *orange and red* I kept getting reference to wine- and how they enhance flavor or food- intensifies it-However this to be interpreted Whether metaphor or symbolism For some reason the last line- I kept being pulled to the three words- stay still here
and it felt as if maybe a space or bringing *still here*- having that on a separate line- just a thought...
of fluttered wings,
stay
still here.
Only because when I read the three together- for me....it felt like a breath I was needing to take but couldn't between the word: stay and still--
Hopefully this makes some sense~
Excellent take on the prompt ~
Powerful images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Sweet and sensual, filled with gentle serenity. Beautiful write for the picture you chose. My favorite verse is when you spoke "curved soft whispers."
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cute
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Lovely imagery. Lovely soft word choices. Well done.
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