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short play

You acted

like my tears
never bothered
  you

and

  like my halo
never condemned
you

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  • Swan song gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    Yes!!!!! This has some power to it! Very well done


  • movedon
    August 29, 2008

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    Wow.

    You really did an awesome job with this one. So many times we can act like tears dont affect us....when they really rip your soul....and that's something that everyone feels at one part in their life. This is a really relational write..which is why I love it! Great job.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • Desire gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: short play
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: like my halo- for some reason when I read Your verse- these words pulled- and for someeeeeeee reason- I kept getting reference to words: little white lie- and for someeeeeee reason kept getting reference to inability to say no in many cases- as if fear of hurting person's feelings- also while reading that same line- was getting it a smidge bent- due to it being sat on as if to hide it when necessary- if that makes any sense- I'm getting phrase: figment of imagination but in reference to ideals-expectations- now with this I kept associating to another person- like when something is brought to Your attention- sounds *far fetched* Hopefully this is making sense for I am trying to decipher what I am seeing while reading Your verse- and trying to not sound like I am talking underwater and when I read: like my tears never bothered you- I kept getting You have a weakness (or You melt) for crying children- each time I get to that line- I am seeing a crying child and feeling this aaaaaaaw type of sensation~ however that is to be interpreted- Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully this makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Powerful images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~

  • strangerforeigner
    August 21, 2008
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    Very well done. You told a whole story in 15 words. Impressive.