Love meets disaster,
love meets a lie,
so simple of words,
just searching your eye.
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 15 Words XXXVI - by Desire.
700 points, ended August 27, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 4 to 14 lines only by piccola.
1800 points, ended April 12, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like it, but don't really understand L3. But it is true that eyes and eye contact can tell a lot about a person's true feelings. Thank you for entering.
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yay!
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Picture D
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: Love meets a lie- also when I got to the last line- for some reason I kept being shown how the eye- Window to the Soul and by searching the person's eye- searching into his or her Soul- what is this person made of- core values, etc but with the first two lines- I kept getting reference to online- like meet someone online- the other becomes a facade- speaks but does not balance the words spoken- basically the contents of the package is not what the outside of the box says however that is to be interpreted- Whether metaphor or symbolism
Hopefully this makes some sense~
Excellent take on the prompt ~
Powerful images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Hm, a little ambiguous, but pretty.
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