For a long time she lived in a fantasy,
clear visions, still so distant,
almost unreachable, yet there to see.
Discerned by her mind’s eyes amid mystery,
floating on the unknown with images constant;
for a long time she lived in a fantasy.
Dreams in her head took over reality;
truth became vague and thoughts errant
almost unreachable, yet there to see.
She faces dreams that can turn into debris,
shards of life within illusions so frequent.
For a long time she lived in a fantasy.
Her utopia, a short instant of being happy,
pleased with her own world, being reticent;
almost unreachable, yet there to see.
Looking now at her dreams, she breaks free,
liberated to live a life where truth is incessant.
For a long time she lived in a fantasy,
almost unreachable, yet there to see.
Author notes
No meter, iambic or even an entry to be judged here
In a list
A contest entry
- Villanelle with Meaning by Peteskid.
2250 points, ended September 3, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent~
A beautiful villanelle
And some wonderful poetry here...
So soothing and such an easy read
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Susan~~~
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it's almost within our reach is what you are saying, and with that kind of stregnth, everything is possible. Liked very much.
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Ahhh. Simply delightful in its smoothly read form and style. A joy and a pleasure. ~Pamela
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A beautiful and thoughtful villanelle form, has a gentle cadence like a surface of the sea that hides powerful currents sweeping over an entire world...the definitions ring, more like a reconciliation than emphasis. Wonderful poetry here. Thank you for this fine [non-]entry into the contest...PK
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This is a lovely villanelle, Mari and I loved how this one moved from fantasy to reality, to the truth...the breaking free.
~ Nicolette
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Brilliant piece of poetry. So smoothe and easy to read. Great rhyme and rhythm. Simply beautiful.
Sam
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Ah, the quest,
fighting one's way
out of the illusion,
stepping free of debris
and dangerous shards
to reach freedom---
"...to live a life where truth is incessant."
Now that is a thought in which to wrap oneself,
to get comfortable, to believe that life exists...
Superb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
M-C
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Yes! You saw it so well!
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Across land and sea,
ideas navigate
to find like-thinking minds...
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I'm sorry. I won't say more, you'll just protest.
Any real comment I can add to this will just kessen the depth, will be shallow in comparison, so I will do the unthinkable and be brief.
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And you were brief probably because you didn't have much time...
I like brief
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I like brief
I turn the other cheek!
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Oh Mari, I fell in love with the words instantly...such a beautiful mind...eventhough she lives in fantasy...
with your words...it was almost reachable...like it was far more from being an illusion.
I have nothing to say...I just admire it a lot!!!
Anna Lee
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