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Blessed

Become the person you've always wanted
    to be
Let go of the pain locked in the secret
    corners of your heart
Enjoy the time that you have been
    given
Strive to reach higher than you ever have
    before
Seek for heaven in the depths of
    your heart
Embrace the child within your
    soul
Daily...give thanks....you will be truly
    BLESSED!

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This is a very different format for me. What do you think?

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 15

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    Now, luv...you have my attention...Wisdom and inspiration are here for the taking if one will listen...and I am listening! Bookmarking!

  • Topnotchsy
    August 27, 2008

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    Nice write. The first time through I did not even realize it was an acrostic, which says something about the poem, and how well it was written.

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 26, 2008

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    Hello Firefly53633.

    Well I have to laugh, this is another write where I can't wax like I normally would. Once again, I agree with many words in here, an insightful and honest write, and you are correct, in my opinion, to state that a person should go within, but with a name like mine, I am hardly going to say anything else, ahhahaa. Your acrostic is done very well, and doesnt read like a forced acrostic, each line making sense, holding validity.

    Regarding the format, I presume it is for extra emphasis to hammer home the point. I have to say, I would have liked it better as each sentence with their own line, but with no punctuation as you have done. Just don't think acrostics suit punctuation, even though I am a punctuation kind of guy. Anyway away from the format, once again, your words ring true.

    My regards.


  • Triami Arack
    August 21, 2008
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    I really liked this, try using this new format of yours to a greater extent!


  • sassykitty
    August 21, 2008

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    Interesting affirmation and an interesting structure going on here. Always good to read something more positive like this. Thanks for sharing.


    • firefly53633
      August 21, 2008
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      Thanks for the response!

      tHIS WAS A BIT OFF THE WALL FOR ME. tHOUGHT i WOULD SEE HOW IT WORKED OUT! tHANKS FOR READING.

  • Amandam
    August 21, 2008

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    Nice!

    While all humanity vainly seeks an empty sky for a God that doesn't answer...your poem speaks to the inner God which is accessible and ready to guide you if only you will heed that inner voice.  Lovely


  • ChickenPie
    August 21, 2008

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    thoughtful

    i know you didnt write this for me but in a way it feels like you talking to me or telling me great work grandmother

  • Topnotchsy
    August 20, 2008
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    This is a beautiful piece and holds a lot of truth. Nice write!! Acrostics can be tough.

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