Seraphic innocence caressed by ether-light.
Fractal fountains poured from the heavens
with an illusion of her proximity, sweeping
radiant haze over provocative spaces.
Awash in waves, like whirling starlight
in liquid lucent lulls... Lust found my
waking dreamscapes of desire, drifting
from within secret places that form them.
She came musing along in sweltering layers,
whetting a seduction as riveting as rain.
Author notes
Sensual Image Prompt ~ Credit: Katarina Solokova ~ Line Limit Removed [Wrote 10 Lines] ~~~ Note: I usually left align these days... but I thought I'd center it this time... ??? Doin' something different, while I nit-pik it a bit... cia
A contest entry
- Beautiful. by JinSays.
300 points, ended August 30, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent
This sure lives up to the title So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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You painted a picture and I loved it.
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Wow Ithy
It's been a while since I've dropped in your way but am I glad I took the time to check in... this is just GORGEOUS!!!
Um, two things though. Awashed should be changed to Awash; and unless you really mean to credit the paint people, lucite should be altered to read lucent
Nevertheless, the intent is clear and you did a super job with this!
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A Muse's Dream... With Metaphor Galore!!!
Good luck in the contest!!! Peace, Cyn 
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waking dreamscapes of desire, drifting
from within secret places that form them.
Align it anyway you want to, Im not going to split hairs. There's enough to do in our lives without worrying about that stuff.
Your poem was awe-inspiring. I think you did a wonderful thing with our lovely lady, thank you,
always,
Jin
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WOW!! This piece creates a very sensual, seductive atmosphere. You use your words brilliantly here. Great take on the picture. Best of luck in the contest.
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