All around us pain and grief,
faith stolen, by the thief.
Suffering, death inexcusably thrive,
starvation, war steal many lives.
Look to God, stop to pray,
does He hear or turn away?
watching suffering faith grows dim,
as we search and look for Him
Son of God from heaven above,
gave his life shed his blood.
died for us at Calvary,
ransomed us set us free.
"Father forgive them" this he said,
gave his life for ours instead.
Took our sins took our pain,
so mortal ones can live again.
Found a Saviour stick to him,
paid the price for mortal sin.
Let them live, for them I die,
feel my pain hear my cry.
Author notes
This means everlasting life, their taking in knowledge of you the only true God and the one you sent forth Jesus Christ. (John 17:3.)
A contest entry
- A Contest For Christians by Michael H..
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
You can lose your faith, you can lose your hope, as long as you never lose your love you can get your faith and your hope back, do you beleive this.?
Comments
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Well a pleasure to read your profound and true poem
love the rhyme
God bless you my friend...
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A lovely lovely poem with real meaning behind it. I am not religious but felt this in the same way you feel a good hymn. It seeks to dig deeper into your soul. Well worth the Trophy! I wrote quite a religious poem (about Christmas) that I always liked. I don't think you have to be religious to appreciate this poem.
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Thank you for calling by Net and taking the time to read and leave a kind and encouraging comment much appreciated.
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In my opinion, an eye opener. Jesus' death is not unfamiliar to christians, or people of many religons, but when you write about it like you did, it seems to create a stronger emotional connection, one that people can relate to, not just a historical event that rests in the mind.
Thanks for sharing your write.
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Only just seen your comment today EndlessDepression thank you sincerely for your encouragement and kind comment.
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WOW! I am not a christian (really far from it) but this is so beautifully penned it seriously could be published. You should try to submit this to a few magazines. If you need help in finding a couple of magazines to send them to and would like to, let me know, I will help you. I seriously feel you should submit this one!
TD
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You're nice and kind...I like you... I spoke to you once on the thread about God in the Cafe Forum.
I just went to your page and I saw that I had signed your guest book in November 2008.
Thank you so vey much for your really sweet and lovely comment.
I do so value your opinion and lovely upbuilding words..thank you so much...
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Pretty good... my only two reservations are: 1. that the pronouns referring the Lord are not capitalized - that is (unless I'm outdated) a grammar rule. For example in P2, L2: "does he hear..." would be "does He hear..." and 2. the last paragraph is actually kind of confusing - mixed tenses? mixed narrators?
I would like to encourage you, because I believe the message you're trying to convey is a good one. 1 Timothy 1:15
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Hallo Dear Bookgirl...thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. Also thank you for the constructive criticsm, I will do that capitalisation of the letters immediately thank you for telling me. As soon as I submit this I shall do it.
The part that says "Let them live for them I die."
feel my pain hear my cry.
[refers to the human race and it is Jesus saying this to God]
Once more thank you kindly for your helpful comment and thank you very, very much for the lovely scripture...
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Perhaps a poem perfect for the season and the true meaning of Christmas. well done poet and I thank you for your kind comment on my poem.
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Oh Truth
Oh so very beautiful my spiritual sister. Jesus is the way and the truth and the light!! Just a beautiful tribute to our God and Lord Jesus Christ.
Your rhyme, rhythm and flow with deep spiritual truths is so refreshing to read. Congratulations on the silver so well deserved. Thank you for sharing with me.
Blessings,
Much Love
Kelle Marie 
PS I'm trying to get caught up on my return the favors. I got way behind. Please forgive me....
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Thank you for your kind words of encouragement it is always a joy to write about what we love. Thank you
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A lovely piece...
A lovely piece; we are more than blessed - to have been rescued the ransom that was paid, by the blood of the Lamb; congratulations on the silver trophy; nicely done. --Joe
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Just to say thank you for your kind words and appreciative thoughts...most kind of you
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"Let them live, for them I die, feel my pain hear my cry"
Those last two lines say so much, both of Jesus, and what is expected of Christians.
I am truly inspired by your poetry. To be able to see Faith through your poetry truly touches me. I have tried to do the same, though I don't know of the results.
God Bless -
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging words they mean a lot...
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great poem! congrats on the trophy too.
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Thank you, hope you are well, a nice subject to write about, take care and Jehovah's blessings.
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This was fantastic. Nice rhyming. This is a good poem.
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Thank you for the silver award I enjoyed writing this poem as the subject is very dear to my heart, thank you.
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Thank you.
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