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Blood on the moon



Slow and careless drive

over terrain familiar traveled

radio buzz, cold wind blows.



Road gets darker

a wrong turn, stray from the known.



Fear replaces familiar as the

radio message repeats

and repeats.


....GPS fails.....



Realization hits

visions of aliens and grinning mad men pulse

and there's blood on the moon



signs of doom squeeze a disbelieving heart

but the consumation of this terror

waits for another day

Author notes

This actually happened to me the other day, it was so bizzare!

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  • RT KatPat
    July 30
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    Great! Very descriptive! Drive carefully
    Nicely written piece


  • fallingangel12
    August 24, 2008

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    This was a really good poem. I enjoyed reading it. and that actually happening to u is bizzare. Sometimes ppl take wrong turns and it leads them to a weird place but they find themselves out of the place. Good writeing though.


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 20, 2008
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    i really enjoyed this poem! it is unique, it reeled me in from the start! it has a bit of a scary suspense! freaky that it actually happened to you. anyway, i loved it! really good poem, and i wish for you to have an extremely pleasant day! lolz
    -Peanut Butter Fudge (<3s your poem, and loves you as well! =D)


  • sassykitty
    August 20, 2008

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    I liked this, a lot. Vivid and evocative description really makes this live in the head. I hate that feeling when you have no control over such things. Nicely structured, appropriate imagery and I liked the way it almost made me hold my breath. Thanks for sharing. Freaky!


  • wattle silver member
    August 20, 2008

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    Ms Sarah, a horror story, GPS-less. You're lucky to have survived. Imagine for a moment the phone failing as well, and the engine. Better to stay at home reading fine poetry I'm thinking. ---- I loved the mood of this, very clever. Thank you.


    • Sarah957
      August 20, 2008

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      LOL Wattle! When it happened I thought it was just too much not to write down. Even while i was right there in the moment half of me was scared and the other half was thinking this is just too horror movie cliche NOT to write down!


  • owlish
    August 20, 2008

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    Wow, very intense, the title totally hooked me. "Road gets darker/A wrong turn, strays from the known" sounds very frightening and grim. Good piece you have here, very unique.

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