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Infinitive

my hands have no more words
than fingered hush
against such lips as these

placed beneath ardor
in burning deep enjoin

peel back the layers
of soft

that "what I was" when
you first sought
of other need

my feathers tingle when
the wind will not suffice

I shiver

tongue of kiss
like lies
that end in pleasure

 

 

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Thank you Cannonsfire.

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  • JinSays gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    YES!
    Thank you Cannonsfire! She's great ain't she?
    Your entry: gulp.

    Let's see,
    this:

    my hands have no more words
    than fingered hush
    against such lips as these

    placed beneath ardor
    in burning deep enjoin

    peel back the layers
    of soft
    and. . .

    I shiver

    tongue of kiss
    xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo

    Well crap, I copied damn near your whole entry.

    Again, thank you Cannonsfire, for whatever you did honey, writing like this should be distributed in small controlled quantities.
    Yeah, it's that good
    jin


    • sheltered
      August 30, 2008
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      Thank you.


      • Cannonsfire
        August 30, 2008
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        Congrats hun on the gold, it needed your innovation to make it this good. C

    • Cannonsfire
      August 25, 2008
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      lol Honestly Jin we just had a conversation of sorts with one line each and then sheltered put it all together in this form. He should get more of the credit than me, I just answered his lines the best I could. It was a fun one to do with him and we are still talking too


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    August 21, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very poignant write, indeed. I enjoyed your imagery.
    Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, very well done.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 21, 2008
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    i really love that last verse its writeb beautifuly best of luck in the contest

  • Marilyn20Wabba
    August 21, 2008

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    Hey this is wonderful. Feathers kissing and lies. the 3 ingredients of a great love affair. Well done.


  • cheaphotelsign
    August 20, 2008

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    wow...i almost feel like i've invaded too much privacy by reading this...dig it...way deep and a welcomed heavy to it...demands re-reading more than once...well done you two

  • Cannonsfire
    August 20, 2008

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    You stripped this back and refined it to pure sensuality and perhaps all it needs to be titled as is 'Infinitive'
    for it has that timeless appeal. Thank you for doing this with me, it was a pleasure C


    • sheltered
      August 21, 2008
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      It was a pleasure to strip you down.
      Your words taste wonderful.


      • Cannonsfire
        August 21, 2008
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        Now when you say this lol I do believe you are talking about a different animal again


    • sheltered
      August 20, 2008
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      I like it


  • jcat gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    Such soft sensuality flows beautifully across the page. What a delightful read to the senses...Very well done and best wishes

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