For an eternity I’ve felt so incomplete
Not conscious of what was missing
But cognitive of an enormous deficiency
Until that day you broke down my defenses
Captivated my heart within your first glance
Then it all became majestically clear
You were the light to the darkness within
The keeper of my soul, my knight in armor
For every human being is a single piece
Enduring in two pieces…Unknown
If I had only known you were waiting
Somewhere in the world just for me
I would have faced anything to find you
For you have made me whole again
All the pieces bonded together by Love
A contest entry
- enduring in two pieces... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended September 3, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You wrapped the truts together and this made this piece a wonder......well done...I love it..and my thanks for sharing it...
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Thank you so very much for the kind comment it means a lot to me. May God bless and keep you always.
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I feel the grace of this verse...
it speaks well of trusting completeness
to another. Love, it wears so many faces,
but true acceptance of everything another
is offers relationships endurance.
I did question the use of "transparently clear"
as both words mean the same and offer the same
imagery. Maybe majestically clear (just a thought)
as it would echo to some extent the accolades of
eternity you begin with. Blue
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. I very much liked the way "majestically" reads and have used it. Again thank you. God Bless,
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Romantic innocence refound read within this fine verse.Such a test and testament to the quality of twin spirits unity.
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and your very kind comments. God Bless
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