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Bring out the me in me

You make me smile like no one else,
I giggle constantly.
With a daily dose of laughter
You bring out the child in me.

You say you miss me on the phone
I can't help but agree.
When we're miles apart from each other
You bring out the lonely in me.

You tell me that you love me,
There's no where else you'd rather be.
When you whisper as you hold me
You bring out the romantic in me.

You fill me with fresh confidence
Somehow you make me see,
When I share with you my hopes and dreams
You bring out the me in me.

Author notes

This title popped into my head a little while ago and I thought I'd play around with it. I was thinking about someone who was urging me to be myself and not to worry so much about what other people think...cliche, perhaps but hey. We all have our struggles.

Anyway, while I was thinking about this I thought about all of the other things he sparked in me. This poem is the product of those thoughts.

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  • CatQueen248
    September 3, 2008

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    You might want to change "no where" to one whole word "nowhere." This was such a cute poem. Congratulations on gold.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 28, 2008

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    You had me hooked at the title, which I absolutely love, and the way you carried the idea through the poem is fabulous. Truly a great piece!! One of the best I've read in a long while!! Nice write. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 28, 2008

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    You had me hooked at the title, which I absolutely love, and the way you carried the idea through the poem is fabulous. Truly a great piece!! One of the best I've read in a long while!! Nice write. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Nostalgic Moon
    August 21, 2008
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    i love the title
    this poem is extremely wonderful.
    good luck in my contest


  • Lislaine
    August 20, 2008
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    NICE very cute


  • tarcus
    August 20, 2008

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    And somehow And I can't And I giggle
    Drop the and's they are not needed; the poem is great without them.
    Well done with the right amount of need and sentiment.


  • Kappa Pyua
    August 20, 2008

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    This is a very good poem. I don't think it is cliche at all. Thanks for sharing this with everyone. I hope to read some more inspired ones by you. I'm in so many groups and now have a big family. I'm trying to get to all of them. Keep writting!


  • Hidden
    August 20, 2008
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    awsome. i really like how its so happy. it kinda made me smile. great write, awsome job!


  • Redeemed15
    August 20, 2008
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    Wow. So deep. I luv this poem.


  • CelticQueen
    August 20, 2008

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    I don't know how long this poem has been up, but I'm surprised you have no other comments on it. I found it enjoyable to read and a different take on a relationship.

    Too often, when a person is writing TO someone they care about, the poem becomes trite and filled with cliches. I did not find that to be the case here. You may have tackled a subject that's been addressed a thousand times before - it's hard not to - but you've done it in what I consider a fresher way.

    Nicely done. celtic queen

    • stephilou
      August 20, 2008
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      This is a brand new one, actually. Just today

      Thanks!

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