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The Touch

 

 

My darling, it wasn't meant to be

And I'm so sad that you had to see 

The devil that roared out in me

But just always know I love thee

 

My darling, please don't look sad

I know you feel you've been had

But it's a your fault, just a tiny tad

That you picked on me so very bad

 

My darling, I didn't want you to cry

But you deserved that hit on your thigh

Don't worry now, let out a nice sigh

Because tonight it all will just die

 

My darling, it's not nice to say such

Hateful words that hurst so much

Your heart cringes into a bunch

As I go for the kill in my touch

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lanasaur
    March 18

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    Cool!!!

    This is so good! i said it to myself in a italian axcent it sounds brilliant! Great job!
    Lana
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  • nature
    September 6, 2008
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    Childish

    Time waits for no one and if you do not learn to live in the beauty of life you loose it.


  • xXDarkChildXx
    August 25, 2008

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    Wow, such words have been penned here. Lovely job, I enjoyed every line, and felt EVERYTHING. the hurt of the words, and the end, oh so horrible. But, I love the choice in words, and the way you wrote this. The rhyming was lovely. Painted a real picture to me. I am glad I read this poem, keep on writing.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 21, 2008

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    i am just going to sit back in awe of what i have just read, that is all i can do, keep it flowing, my friend


    • tears.of.silence
      August 22, 2008
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      Old buddy

      My goodness I didn't think you'd actually read this, I'm glad you did. Great to hear from you, I'll be by to read some of your work later.

  • DarkRomantic113
    August 20, 2008

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    Oh, great penmanship here. The reader can take so much from these words. I think personifying it by adding, "darling" made it witty almost. I also sensed subtle themes of BDSM. This poem could be about that, inner thoughts or straight up reality. Again, great writing.

    • tears.of.silence
      August 20, 2008

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      Dark

      Smiles.. this could be taken as a BDSM theme if by "die" meant the attitude of the person who was creating a problem and "kill" meant that in lieu of teach. But you are right it can be straight up as well and mean abuse. Which this one this time meant abuse.

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