I swallow with longing
I always will
watching her forever
perfect toes
the arch of her heal
graceful limbs
that hollow
behind her knee
flair of her hips
hourglass figure
stops time
I forget to breathe
eyes continue to roam
into
perfect breast
puckering at the chill
though morning’s sun
peaks
like tom
then reaches to taste
her slender neck
breaching mocha locks
waves of submission
lightly caressed
with her delicate hand
I swallow again
possessed
Author notes
Host Prompt: Please don't tell me what I see, tell me what you feel.
Visual Stimulation: Katarina Solokova
***There is feeling in just a look...
In a list
A contest entry
- Beautiful. by JinSays.
300 points, ended August 30, 2008, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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flair of her hips
hourglass figure
stops time
I forget to breathe
eyes continue to roam
into
perfect breast
puckering at the chill
Whew. This is gorgeous. Every line is a silk thread, and it's all woven together, the results are stunning, the emotional and physical converging, blending nicely.
Sumptuous would be a good one word description of this, and yes, you've brought me beauty, and I so thank you.
P.S... yes, You're absolutely right about the feeling in a glance. It's happened to me too rarely, but still
thank you for entering and best wishes to you,
jin
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I like this! It's very stalker-esque lol. :]
"I swallow with longing
I always will
watching her forever"
I like the beginning of this. The way you continue to describe her would make any reader long for her.
"though morning’s sun
peaks
like tom
then reaches to taste
her slender neck
breaching mocha locks"
I like the "peaks/like tom" bit. It made me laugh lol I also like "breaching mocha locks". I feel like I can smell and see her hair [without the picture].
"waves of submission"
I love this line. Your writing- as always- is stunning. ^_^ Best of luck in the contest. :]
-Lily♥
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