I feel the heat as I walk in the door
A primal need igniting my desire
The scent of lust has me demanding more
A smell that always sets my brain on fire
You sigh and I am yours in every way
A sound that makes me glad to be alive
I know we're on the move, no man can stay
There's always something more for which to strive
I see the look of love that fills your eyes
Enjoy the way you walk across to me
You touch my face I feel the sweet surprise
This was the moment I was meant to be
Our tongues engage and lips are softly traced
I'll never tire of testing how you taste
Author notes
14 lines meant a sonnet of course...
L1-2 sensing heat
l3-4 smell
l5-6 sound
l7-8 motion
l9-10 sight
l11-12 touch
l13-14 taste
I hope it meets this prompt :-
"Short pieces about sensory, touch, smell
hear, anything you feel that fits the contest
short and direct .
no more than 2 lines per sensory
and no more than 14 lines total,
can be as short as 2 lines as long as it
associates with senses.. "
no pre-writes
In a list
A contest entry
- All Senses Contest ( pre-writes allowed now ) by misticmoonlite.
650 points, ended August 26, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Well crafted and versed with perfect flow of the unforced rhyme!
Well Done & Good Luck in the contest!
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Well done once again.
Of course what did one expect.
Great job and best wishes in the
contest.
Love
Tory
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Nicely executed. I am now going to goad you and say - do it again, this time expressing the same senses without naming any of them.
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oh heavens SATAN?????
I never knew....
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Jist because I telt the wee man tae get aff his erse and dae some REAL work?
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get thee behind me Satan!!!
I'll see about it when I have got some more work done!
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Right on
you hit the nail on the head and identified the true sensories, very passionate Sonnet, thank you for this entry..good luck
Linda
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