happieness? colour?
to draw unnecesary attention.
to not be able to blend in.
with the shadows. and the pain.
my past life of happy memories.
so why do i feel the need to anilate it?
hate.
to hate every soul that hasn't
felt pain of your velvet touch.
but i will thank you for this pain.
it made me capable of isolation.
pain is partnered with hate.
and tenacity with beauty.
the road i walk is dimmed in my radiance.
and the world grow cold with my presence.
there is no need for beauty when i am solitary.
[only a sharp reminder of why you loved me in the first place]
A contest entry
- "She Must Be The Saddest Girl To Ever Hold A Martini." by SliptheFlitch.
300 points, ended August 28, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Prompt Contest.[Dark] by Sweet Impatience.
970 points, ended August 31, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow so dark and sorrowful and yet so beautifully written. Wonderful piece! I love it all. I wish I could point out things I loved the most in this but it's all brilliant! You're so talented!
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I really like this poem that you have written. I especially like the last 4 lines a lot, especially the last one.
I do ask that you make on slight change. please capitalize your i's. there are 4.. thank you
besides just those few capitalization errors. This is an excellent poem.. I love your take on the prompt.
good luck in the contest
kat
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Ouch..this is a painful write and I feel the strong sadness behind it. The ending especially is really good and carries the weight of sadness. Good luck in the contest..take care.
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Nice one
I like how you ended this...
"[only a sharp reminder of why you loved me in the first place]"
Good luck in all these contest little sister
All the best
Ken
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thanks for the comment bro. for some reason this one is my favourite poem i've wriiten. although it may not be my best.
thanks bro.
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