when whispered words
dripped as honey
frozen on popsicle sticks
and misguided youth
stealing attention
from purpose -
I should have
held you accountable
examinations
slowly scattered
among intellectual weeds
failure
a means to an end
for lack of conscience
Author notes
Prompt: "Accountability is not for those who struggle...it's for those who succeed"
A contest entry
- Prompt: Accountability by ml12.
600 points, ended August 30, 2008, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Constructive criticism is always welcome!
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I find strength in the line that admits you should have held them accountable. Because that shows truth.
Examinations, slowly scattered - that makes me think of doctors rooms and diagnosis
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Your words are affective dear friend, life is full of decisions, some easier to make than others, this is a quandry many face, but what ever it takes to be successful, good or bad we are all accountable...
Congratulations on the silver trophy,
Love and smiles
~Lilac
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I can see this is wearing a shiny silver and so well deserved, this had meaning on so many different levels, well done and congratulations on your trophy. Best to you
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Great write with deep meaning. Congratulations on silver.
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Great job! It goes very well with the prompt.. Keep writing!
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Yes todays youth have an answer for everything, or so they think, they forget the season of accountability comes around. or just don't care.
Deep thought nicely done.
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I like your prompt. I wouldn't have known the subject until I read the prompt. It wasn't conveyed that well to me. I think everyone should be more accountable for their actions.Congrats on the silver trophy.
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Outstanding
This is quite a deep poem that confronts success and finds it ultimately lacking:
examinations
slowly scattered
among intellectual weeds
of failure
I liked your choice of language and the way you developed the theme of this poem with an interesting take on the prompt. Congratulations on the trophy.
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I like the direction that you have taken and the way you have expressed the point through some interesting imagery. It's short (which I appreciate) and I liked the strength in your language (e.g. 'stealing attention'). Thanks for entering the contest
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