Trace your fingers upon my palm
Dipping your toes asbently
Sitting together at the water's edge
Eyes sipping the hale moonlight
Wind whispering valiantly against the water's calm
I whisper in your ear
Something about love
And holding you dear
But my tongue speaks softly
For my words are for you
And no other to hear
Falling leaves upon the pond
I smile
Your head upon my shoulder
The smell of your hair against my cheek
Curious fingertips upon my palm
Tickling fortunate lines
The moon swings sullenly above
Jealous of our curious
waking
furious love
Casting down his pale and wriggling wrath
Upon she and I
Drenched in moonlight
I deny
The battered darkness of a cowardly sun
Shattered by the blinking of untouchable stars
Each blinking pinprick a needle
Pulled through the black blanket of the night
Each pinprick blinking
thinking he is the one
Your yawn brings your head from my shoulder
Your hair from my cheek
Fingertips as fleeting atonements flee
Leaving a curiosity to seek
A moment more between you and me
The night sky's eye thus shrouded
As heavy eyelid does caress
and flies
Across the pale backwards eyes
Of a man dreaming awake
Looking inside his dream machine to find
Nothing but a burning in the back of his throat
a tickling just beneath his lungs
a weakness just behind his knees
And a desire to have and to hold
Blessed are such dreams as these
Burned as if real into my mind
Begging me to grasp them tight
But I will ever awake to find
That no matter how I hard I might
Dreams forever fade to dust and go
As ashes on the breeze
Author notes
Demington
5.) Pen me something beautiful filled with love and passion and sensuality.
Hope I don't disappoint...the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout.
Solomon
http://www.biblegateway.com/passage/?book_id=26&chapter=2&version=31
JRR Tolkien
http://www.poetseers.org/poets/j_r_r_tolkien_poems/tinuviel
Someday.
I would rather be blind, deaf and dumb...than die before having met my wife.
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Comments
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I love your poem. It is wonderful and absolutly great. Very detailed and shows me what love means to you. That is a great feeling to know how someone else views love. thanks for entering good job and good luc
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Nice imagery. Every time i say that I hate myself because it seems over used in comments; but it's true! I can see feet dangling in the water ... toes touching and that image sets up the rest of the write. Nice job and thank you for entering the contest.
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You have some good imagery in there. This was beautifully written. I really liked the beginning, but toward the middle to the end, it didn't keep my attention as well. "Blessed are such dreams as these
Burned as if real into my mind
Begging me to grasp them tight
But I will ever awake to find
That no matter how I hard I might
Dreams forever fade to dust and go
As ashes on the breeze" That was a beautiful ending. You did a good job. Thanks for entering and Good luck in my contest.
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This was a beautiful poem. I especially liked
"Eyes sipping the hale moonlight
Wind whispering valiantly against the water's calm"
It is so soft and soothing. Very nice! -
This piece . . . I wish I could support this critically, but I cannot. It is breathtaking, absolutely intoxicating. I love how you weave fate and the moon into this with subtle imagery - and some that is not so subtle.
The sixth stanza broke my heart. "A moment more . . ." ah, how miserable.
The eighth gave me chills. It's very powerful, and yet easy to identify with.
I should have known I'd see your name in the author's notes at the end. Beautifully done, friend; you've touched me again.
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Very, very beautiful. Thank you for sharing this with me and entering my contest
Good luck. 
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So elegantly beautiful. This was a superb write. I wish you the best with your dear one and good luck in the contest. -
I really loved the last line. This was such a beautiful and well done poem. Congratulations on silver.
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wow! this poem is amazing! such awesome imagery!! my favorite part was the last stanza, i find myself living that alot. and i like how u used three different titles, well done!
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beautiful, thanks for your entry best of luck
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I hope you find what you looking for. Very touching and soothing. Great work
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"Curious fingertips upon my palm
Tickling fortunate lines"
That line is just plain sweet, & kinda witty too.
Very passionate and romantic write. Kinda sad, with the longing aspect.
I don't think you have to worry, you will find a wife. You're too sweet not to, and a great writer as well.
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