To my lost, lonesome love,
It seems your laughter has began to fade from my mind.
Though your letters pile on my dresser
and remind me of what we had[lost],
your fingerprints no longer scar my heart.
You will fade, just as the blonde you streaked
through my hair begins to,
just as yesterdays sun burn has faded to a tan
&& just as the pain behind my heart recedes to an ache.
My only wish now is to wake knowing
that your memory didn't stain my pillow
as it has for so many nights.
Forgive me and forget me, for, in time,
even real love fades.
♥
Your dear, destroyed darling.
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A contest entry
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4200 points, ended September 8, 2008, 72 entries
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your letters pile on my dresser
would that happen 2 b from Reggie's speach
that speach was sad... i cried
it was good thoug.
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Ohkay, so I absolutely loved this poem ALOT. You wrote so wonderfully & honestly & openly. Incredible write, love. I enjoyed reading every word, as I can relate very well.
-your fingerprints no longer scar my heart.
You will fade, just as the blonde you streaked
through my hair begins to,
just as yesterdays sun burn has faded to a tan
&& just as the pain behind my heart recedes to an ache.
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LOVE the metaphors in that line, and your comparison to everything. Amazinggg. Keep it up, & thanks for entering ! ♥ -
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I liked the way you structured this as a letter, a painful love note which is about losing love. I loved the way you ended it with "Your dear, destroyed darling." that to me just ends the poem showing how much emotion there is. The message you give is sadly very true. I loved the line "just as the pain behind my heart recedes to an ache", I could really feel that. I also really loved the lines about the memory staining the pillow, I thought that was a really nice way of portraying those sleepless nights that often come from losing love. Great Work x
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