in a half sweater
a moth sleeps
Author notes
a not for judging naphthalene haiku
In a list
A contest entry
- FOR MEMBERS of HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by hugh wyles.
1750 points, ended September 4, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A what?
I knew one could write a haiku without using all the three lines, but I have never ever heard that word before in my pittyful life (if that is even written correctly)
I'd cry myself to pieces when I found a moth sleeping in a sweater (s)he's been munching away like that
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Enjoyed your naphthalene haiku!
<3 Maureen
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Oddly enough, it is the larva that eats.
The adult moth exists only to lay eggs...
But where is the poetry in that?
Form of metaphor!
Personification thus
qualifies your poem!
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Well, the moth was just taking a nap, probably after laying her hungry babies there
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Dear Aziram,
The moth my have eaten half the sweater - it's also eaten a whole line of your haiku! How about:
full of wool
in a half sweater
a moth sleeps
???
Do you remember when I used to write uniku? (one-word haiku with single syllable.) I still have the photo of Hideyuka Kamasuki-san presenting me with my black belt.
OK, I won't judge this if you'll tell me how rabbit is done best - fried, grilled, boiled or roast? I got a query from Beijing.
Applause, love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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did he eat the other half...
moth sleeps
on half sweater
full belly...
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full belly
of sweater threads
a moth sleeps
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short haiku that brings a laugh and a longer smile... well done...h
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Having received his anti-naptha shots,
the moth felt free to mmmmmmmmm away. -
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Had to laugh reading about the naphta shots!!!
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in a half-sweater
a moth eats
where are those moth balls?
Is that what those two line haiku are called? I thought they were just your dang dogged determination to be different. Just call me, Mr. Alliteration. I think you just made that up...the name looks fake. Yeah, I'm done.
Oh, not quite...The moth sounds like me after I get done eating..."Zzzzzzz"
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I like your version very so much!! Perfect haiku!
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Ms Gaze, You remind me of my cat and warm sunny places. --- Thank you
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