deadbolt engage
rusted hinges on long screws
in knotty pine
block letter do not enter sign
swings bold
below a single teardrop window
Author notes
Disclaimer:
Jim Morrison was not harmed
in the making of this poem.
A contest entry
- in the dialect of doors by Nicolette.
1050 points, ended August 27, 2008, 28 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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CONGRATS!
Man is this fun aloud, in my Tom Waits grumble, punching the rhyme with a feather.
I Like this a bunch.
Now it's off to make sure you are on my faves...
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Congratulations, simply wonderful.
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Congrats on the silver. Rich visuals. Geo
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I like it much!
Congratulations my friend.
Sol
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Gotta love the thought of long screws in knotted pine...just the right visual for sex..er..door..lol
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"teardrop window"
Freaking gorgeous, & I will steal that sometime, okay?
This sounds sad. & dirty??
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Jessica
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Well it is me.
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That is true.
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It's sad because he locked the door and now he's alone
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LoL okay but why is it naughty? Just has the vibe...
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'long screws in knotty pine' He does dirty better than most lolol
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Don't I know it!! Nice explan.
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i really really want to go through that door...this is super-duper...dig the rust and long screws...can hear the weight...and the window- teardrop?! come on...like it's not a den of torture...love love it...knock knock...
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I don't know why but you make doors sound dirty lol and someone told me I did too lol perhaps I should just say you nailed this door.
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Lol... I assure you it was purely intentional.
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lol almost expected it to be a garage door
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Been there done that.
Yesterdays news. lol
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