Far in the distant past
The burning flame
Igniting the passion
In our relationship
Was burning bright
Years ago our bodies
Were drawn together
By what we thought
Was a never ending force
Decades ago we could love endlessly
Without a single urge to stop
Our love was like a eternal fountain
Spurting out everlasting bliss
Only to cease one day, leaving me asking:
When
Did
We
Change
?
Author notes
Amarithine Lover and my name is Blooming Poet
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anyone relate
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nice imagery in this
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AWe, yes the change comes so slow we don't even relize it till its too late a great write of emotions best of luck in the contest
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Oh wow...
This is beautiful..
And definately what I was looking for.
Mind if I add the link to my page? With credit, of course.
This is so beautiful......
Thank you for entering and good luck.
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This is a rewarding read and so well observed. Couple of thoughts: the second use of "burning" in close proximity I think weakens the first verse. A typo: "a eternal" should read "an eternal"
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Oh, yes, this is very easy to relate to. We grow, expand our experience, change in subtle ways and sometimes we and the people we knew, become peo[ple we don't recognize at all.
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Very good poem. Nice take on the prompt.
Emotionally powerful
this was really good -
Nice Work
A very powerful emotionally gripping poem you have penned here. I really respect how you worded this poem and also how you really letyourself go. I liked that picture you added as those words really ring truth and its very sad when that happens. any ways a very well penned strongly worded poem and enjoyed the read but couldn't help but fele the slight pain you feel through out this poem as if it were a double edged sword. anyways good write and good luck with the contest. Love always, Me =)
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