Eyes hollow, posed with vacant stares of indifference,
just a beating ghost in somber mask,
where behind the look is a portal to the abyss within,
a bottomless pit that is never filled.
Wandering the layers of reality,
stumbling from absence in spiritual nutrients,
heart dispensing the fuel of life,
but its passion octane evaporated.
Mind remembers the lingering scent
from days when tank was topped off
with the gas that made expectation's engine race,
feeling the RPM's of desire roaring in overdrive,
that combustible quintessence in elation's eruptions,
the pure adrenaline petrol for the spirit.
Slowly siphon away by too many stop and go
trips of routine, which depleted the MPG's of hope.
Until there is only a shell of thought
driving on fumes of recollections,
ever looking for the next pump,
pretending denial's gauge is still on F.
Author notes
Prompt: Running On Empty
A contest entry
- Running On Empty by Touchof1der.
600 points, ended August 27, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is quite impressive but I must say, the closing stanza just pops out above all the rest. Your thoughts create such a stunning ending for it all. Best of luck to you in the contest. I appreciate your taking the time and making the effort to enter. I hope it proved to be an enjoyable experience and challenge for you.
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This was an interesting take on the prompt. Too many adjectives and too many words left out for my taste, but I think you covered the prompt well. Good luck in the contest!
~woof
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You have added some interesting spiritual and emotional overtones here. Great take on the prompt. I would imagine there really are people out there who take the shortage of gas as the end of the world!
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Excellent take on the prompt--
My favorite stanza is the conclusion--
"Slowly siphon away by too many stop and go
trips of routine, which depleted the MPG's of hope.
Until there is only a shell of thought
driving on fumes of recollections,
ever looking for the next pump,
pretending denial's gauge is still on F."
Excellent and very imaginative!--Well done and good luck to you in the contest!
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Wow! What a clever write to this prompt! Excellent metaphors and imagery you used to get to the point! Loved that last stanza, as I always seem to!
All the best with this
Gaylene
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Nice write indeed, a pleasure to read, very well done. My best wishes always.
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