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Rhythmic Landslides & A Little Optimism



Is this being excited, or is the floor beneath me moving

from some un-forcasted land shift? - I don't think so;

it must be the rhythm of my perfectly placed trust.

Been waiting months, years to find someone

whom is not ashamed of seeing me as e.v.e.r.y.t.h.i.n.g;

someone who will not hide me a/w/a/y like a locked princess,

someone who will listen to every word that I say.

It means the world to see your smile & taste your lips,

knowing you'd never force me to do something I didn't want to;

that when you say you miss me you actually do -

how cute it is when your Nan told me you were so upset last time,

when I couldn't make it down to yours.

I know that you care & I know you don't listen to him,

that I have no worries with you, like I did the others.

Be careful with him, you know how he is

with anyone I ever get close with.

[I'm sure Alex's shin with never be the same again

& Peter's nose looks like it's had cosmetic surgery.]

I know it's not love, but it could one day be,

even though I still d r e a m of him some nights -

maybe those feelings will just slide a/w/a/y one day?

Lets hope for the happiness to come--for once,

I am actually excited about the prospect of moving on.

& I think you taught me something;

life isn't always what you expect it to be -

sometimes it can be even better.

Author notes

hope this is okies.
yah, a positive one from me... when does THAT ever happen?
hehe

Midnight-x-Rose


Cheers stuey, you taught me many things.
dwelling on those who haven't made a move will only waste me away;
worrying about someone who hurt me allows them to hurt me still today;
I shouldn't be afraid of being myself, no matter what they say

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  • alandriel1138
    October 24, 2008

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    Dripping with pure emotion, you did a great job delivering. I love how you started the piece. And the little note about the boys is wonderful. Awesome job and good luck in the contest!


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    September 2, 2008
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    Wonderfully written and your emotional delivery was good.
    I liked this


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 29, 2008

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    Your words are execptional! I couldn't believe what I read! I think you and the thesaurus have a hot....STUDY date tonight! Lol. Don't ask..Anywho, wonderful job and good luck!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 21, 2008

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    your words are just amazing, and i love this poem it is on the list as my favorite, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • innocence jaded.xx
    August 19, 2008

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    Awww, this is beautiful :] I loved every word. You write so beautifully, and haha, yessum it is different from what you really like, but different is good, & how you wrote this so incredibly beautiful is just wow. I loved it.

    -I know that you care & I know you don't listen to him,
    that I have no worries with you, like I did the others.
    Be careful with him, you know how he is
    with anyone I ever get close with.
    ...

    Those lines said ALOT. Really quite relatable, as I know how that is 100%. Very well worded, love.

    -Been waiting months, years to find someone
    whom is not ashamed of seeing me as e.v.e.r.y.t.h.i.n.g;
    someone who will not hide me a/w/a/y like a locked princess,
    someone who will listen to every word that I say.
    ...

    MEEE TOOOO. I love that hahah. It's great that you know someone like this. Amazinggg poem, doll. Keep it up & thanks for entering

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