It's not the rain
that cascades down
your face.
The rain wont sting
wounds.
The rain wont leave
a salty tinge
in your mouth.
You look at me
with eyes so blue,
but even the clouds
above, darker
then the void
of space,
refuse to shower
us now.
No, it is not the rain
that soaks into
your soft skin,
it is what I did
to you.
Author notes
Stupid ass phone woulden't post this like two times...
A contest entry
- the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 362 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome!
That poem is very deep and it touched me :0) its hard to actually hit my in a spot like that. but it is very relatable. Thank you for a wondeful poem
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I think this is very well written. I like how you put out there that you can hurt people and in turn the same can be done to you. And when I read it I got the sense that the hurt wasn't just physical, it could be mental/emotional too.
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Very well written.
There are times when we have hurt others..feeling or seeing their pain, also strikes deep within ourselves..it's never easy, no matter in which persons shoes we are standing in at the time.
Very well done.
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well imaged
people often find were to shift a blame but this helps the audience know that there is always the precept which one doesnt want to involve in issues. keep writing
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I actually really liked this one...do you write what you feel at the time or just whatever comes to mind?
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I start off with what comes to mind, usually, but then my mind pulls stuff from the past, things I sometimes forget.
Thanks!
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the rain wont sting wounds----wow these are preety deep lines in this one...vry earthly feelin associatd wid dis one...kudos
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One can feel the pain in this, and how the rain is not her tears... I can relate to that part of this quite well. This is great!
Best of luck in this contest!
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this is really beautiful...i love this!!
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Great
I really likee this. You put the emotion here, of regret. Very nice. -
Beautifully written..Loved it..
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I fell your pain about your phone. lol
This is avery lovely and profound piece, and it holds a lot of the emotions that are very relateable. It is interesting, however, to see sorrow on the other side of something done wrong. Thank you for sharing.
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All must be forgiven
It takes time , if you loved It was Love. God is love.
Her skin will heal, as soft as the rain. It takes time to heal..Love you and love will come back again.
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Thank you for entering this.
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This was awesome hun!!! So sad..But I liked it allot!!!
-huggles-
Oz
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Woah, this is..... AMAZING!!! Seriously! I love it.
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Awww, this was so sad. Yet your words make it seem you are truly sorry for the opauin caussed. I liked the part about her tears are not the rain
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