And I know I shouldn't write this
But I feel as if I can't let you leave us
Not without having heard my voice
You never listened to my meek voice
Why should this be any different?
I'm only fooling myself
I doubt you'll even read this
But I hope you will
There are things you need to hear
But if I try to tell you in person
You don't stop yelling to listen
Your hurting but we all are
Please stay, I'll find a way to grow-up
I promise I will
But right now I'm just a kid
Don't make me have to be strong
And smile for my younger sisters
When all I want to do is cry
You want to make me stronger
But right now
All your doing is hurting all of us
Weakening us
We've never had a happy home
But won't you please stay and keep it balanced
With all it's inadequacy
Am I so much of a disappointment that you can't stand to be with me?
Have I messed up that bad?
Is your rancor against so intense that you must leave?
I can never be what you want
Even though you believe I'm not even trying
I'm desperately, with every grain of strength, trying to please you
Be what you want
But I'm not perfect, far from it
Send me away if need be
But please stay
Not for me
But for my Daddy who loves you so much
And my sisters who are still so young
Oh, how I wish I had the courage to give you this tear stained letter
But I cannot stand the thought of you laughing at my foolishness
Or worse, simply destroying the letter without even glancing at it
So instead I tuck this letter in the jewelry box you gave me for Christmas
So many years ago and watch as a you leave us behind
Sincerely,
Your biggest mistake
Author notes
It's a letter to my mom, in one of the hardest times of the year. The times when she decides to leave. I wrote this letter the time it felt most intense, when it seemed she really would leave, I had been so... difficult. It really was my fault, the whole house was on the edge. It didn't take much for it to come crashing down. It was so big and dramatic, my sisters witnessed it all and how they cried while I helplessly patted their shoulders. I'll never forget the image of my mom dragging a suitcase across the kitchen and my dad crying, begging her to stay. It was a low point in my life and the whole not crying in front of my sisters made it so much harder. My friend suggested writing the letter but I never did have the courage to send it. It still sits in my little red jewelry box.
A contest entry
- The letter that never arrived. by withoutlove13.
450 points, ended August 27, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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I cried, Kimmie, it's so beautiful.
I think you should show her...
remind her of what could have been.
Maybe not now,
But when you're older.
When you're out of the house.
That'll be a real mother-daughter bonding experience.
But whether it's now or later, you know she needs to see it.
It's just so beautiful, it's something that I WISH I had the talent to write.
I'm so glad that you wrote the letter,
And things turned out for the best even though you didn't send it.
But send it before it's too late, this is something that you want her to see.
And I loved when you said "But for my Daddy who loves you so much", it's just so pure and heartfelt, it's amazing.
I love it so much, I truly do, you're so, so talented.
The only thing is in line 12, where it says
"Your hurting but we all are",
it's supposed to be,
"You're hurting but we all are",
You just put the wrong "your".
In line 13, grow up doesn't need to have a dash(-).
In line 28, "Is your rancor against so intense that you must leave?"
You're missing a word after against. Is her rancor against WHOM all that bad?
In line 43, "So many years ago and watch as a you leave us behind"
There doesn't need to be an "a" before the word "you".
I hope I helped, those were just a minor few grammatical errors.
Again, this is seriously going to go down as one of my favorite poems... ever.
Great Job Kimberly.
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this clenched my heart, it was so personal and so great.
I don't know you story in great depth but I can tell you that no, it wasn't your fault, she is the only one who made her decision. don't burden yourself with false guilt.
thank you for entering =] -
Very powerful and heartfelt emotion was obviously poured out onto the page in this write. This was so sad and heartbreaking. Best of luck to you.
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