You sit there
You watch me
You judge me
You are my brother
But you tell me I am a selfish brat
I am definetly selfish....
All those nights I cried for your safety
Selfish....
All those times I stuck up for you when I was mocked
Selfish...
All the times you screwed up and I still prayed for you
Selfish...
The countless times you stole from me and I forgave you
Selfish....
And when you made mom cry and I comforted her
Selfish...
But the one thing that was most selfish of me
Was asking you for once to see what I went through
I am sorry that I am nothing but a selfish brat
Author notes
Some feelings from recently that made me look a my past. My eldest brother is almost 20 and he ran away at 15 and since then has been in jail, prison, and boot camp. Now him and his gf moved in and so far they have stolen, lied, and made my mom cry and on top of all that he told me I am a selfish brat who thinks of no one but myself and I deserve to go straight to hell. My other brother is about as screwed up and told me to commit suicide last year so these relationships hurt me alot since I cried myself to sleep over them and they were never there for me. I tried to bring my own sense of serious sarcasm into this poem. Hope you like it. =-)
A contest entry
- All 13 an under Deep Poets by Medina Regal.
495 points, ended August 27, 2008, 15 entries
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Breath-Taking
Well... Like i said breath-taking. I'm speechless. this was an amazing write and i can see it in you heart. i hope you forgive you brother, eventhough it may look like he doesn't deserve it. things are complicated and no-one deserves to be loaded with what you said. i really do hope that you can be happy and just see a brighter side than what is now.
i don't have any suggestions to add i think it is near on perfect.
brilliant write. Please write more. Bless it be, Salliee x -
Wow. I hope you'd be able to forgive your bro, he is still part of your family, and you know what? Screw it. If he's that messed up, don't interact with him, 'cause obviously he thinks you're the one with the problems. Just remember that he's still your brother, and you guys are flesh and flesh.
I rather like this poem, I enjoyed it. It's an awesome rant, and I love the emotional sense in it, and the sarcasm is cool. But just forget about him for a bit. Everyone does things for a reason, though it might not be a good reason. For all you know, he might be doing things "For the Greater Good". (Sorry for the Harry Potter reference
Anyway, I really enjoyed this poem, and it is deep. But a few suggestions would be to maybe include more stanzas instead of saying "Selfish...." every other line. I just feel that it would be better.
Thank you so much for entering!!!
-->pia♫♪
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The funny part is on your 'flesh and flesh' refrence is that me and him are adopted from different families so technically we have no blood relation but I grew up with him since I was a baby where he was adopted about a year before me so like when he was 6 or 7.
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Hmm, you got me. Sorry about the assumption. But you still grew up together...
Anyway. I'm glad you enjoyed that. Haha. Lol.
Thanks for sharing though!!!
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Aww, this is so sad...and even thought your bros are much more older than you, you have shown that you are much more mature than them from this poem. Words like these from family can really hurt but hopefully, with time, things will get better.
~Faithful-Star
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Very good! I'm sure we all know how you feel and there are people that you can talk to! my dad has gotten drunk and tells me that i'm never going to amount to anything and that i'm a no talent piece of s*** countless times. so this poem really sunk in and hit me.
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nice, very well written and deep
it speaks your mind and heart
it expresses how you life is.
i liked at and the sarcasm was good
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I thoroughly enjoyed the sarcasm in this poem. I had a brother like this. I say had because I no longer consider him family. I wish you all the best and hope your brother grows up some day soon.
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Touching
Sometimes people don't grow up until they are older. Some people grow up when they are very young. Others, never grow up.
We are all on different paths in this life.
Don't worry. It is not your fault. Sometimes, we just have to let people make mistakes because it is the only way they will learn. Other times, you need to go your separate ways. I wish you the best of luck in the future! I hope things get better for you.
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i did like it, and very sorry about your brother. him and his girl need to realize what all you have done for them, i would kick them out, i couldn't handle that. you must really love your brother and care about him to deal with such stress. great poem though, i really loved it.
I am definetly selfish....
All those nights I cried for your safety
Selfish....
All those times I stuck up for you when I was mocked
Selfish...
All the times you screwed up and I still prayed for you
Selfish...
The countless times you stole from me and I forgave you
great job, love it, say it was very hard to go through.
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