How bright the sun beams upon me from you
As you sing a songbird's tune to my soul
Showing me the pathway so tender true
Finding feathers to mend broken wings whole
Healing infectious wounds from enemies
With celestial lines you send my way
Heart fractured from fragments of families
Though you cast a ray of light through clouds gray
I'm pleased you feel I've blessed you sister star
Know it's always remained a two way road
For you've created smiles from afar
With your compassionate heart of pure gold
As my ink within drips till it's empty
I soar with the love you've bestowed in me
Author notes
Happy 3rd Anniversary Sis~Star Here At AP!
This Is Dedicated To You, Friend, Angel, And Family!
A contest entry
- Special 3rd AP Anniversary Contest ~ Friendship Reigns~ by Stardust-luvr.
5500 points, ended September 21, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Need Some Love
Comments
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awww
this was so sweet!!! you truly are such a wonderful friend to those that know you and even those that don't 
wonderful write and dedication.
Angel
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry for I'm sure a very beautiful person! a very sweet dedication for your sister Tim.. I liked it a lot right from the heart.. Keep on being so lovely!
Love you baby
Lonely
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This is such a wonderful read! one can feel the love you have for her in this one! I love it!
Congrats on the Silver!
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Excellent
How bright the sun beams upon me from you
As you sing a songbird's tune to my soul
Showing me the pathway so tender true
Finding feathers to mend broken wings whole
Love the opening words to this verse
Very well said
Rick
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Wow this goes right in to ones soul!
You are very clever at weaving and sculpting poetic graphics into a well sculpted poetic art form of cleverly used descriptives and enchanting thoughts.
Brilliant flow and rhyme too.
Love the sentiments which are intense, rich deep and full of soul and feeling.
I love this bit..
"I'm pleased you feel I've blessed you sister star
Know it's always remained a two way road
For you've created smiles from afar
With your compassionate heart of pure gold"
This is beautiful and breathtakinly outstanding, such lovely expression and ambiance, and you seem to have a way in which your express yourself so that the reader feels as if they are right there within you or beside you, all around and within you too, wow that takes phenomenal talent.
Bes tof luck in all contests you really do deserve to win gold for exceptional poems such as these.
Bravo, well done, love it!
Poetic Hugs & Thanks Millions!
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
. Rewarded 8
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A beautiful write, with great imagery and flow. Good luck with the contest...a gold winner in my book.
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Very Good
A poem offering quiet reflection on the essence of being human and sharing (love) an experience intrinsic to our species. The emotions cling to this piece like a second skin taking the reader confidentially into your thoughts and the feelings of "God’s love" surface within the reading. The message is clear and truly poetically expressed with soft words and gentle understanding giving love a fresh new face. Wonderful work with great thought given to the subject mater as it is gently unfolded for the readers delight.
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Beautifully Written
This is beautifully written with a lot of love and care . Very emotional and heartfelt !
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As the floodgates of tears flow know you too are loved with all my heart sharing hope and strength side by side even across the miles yet so near. our hearts so true sharing guidance gifted from above eternall to each other in times of laughter and joy as well as times of burdens praying to relinquish. thank you for always loving me and sharing in my celebration many blessings always xxxx
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Your dedication is filled with love ...
pouring out on us all. What a beautiful, crystal clear write. Thank you so much, Timothy, for the healing elixer.
Blessed be.
Myra
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This is so sweet,
such soft and caring words.
Your words are so warm and loving.
Clearly showes how much you care.
Very nicely done.
Justgot2loveme
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i thought this was a sweet dedication and poem. i thought was really great! i love your creative vocabulary and your outstanding imagery!
"Healing infectious wounds from enemies
With celestial lines you send my way"...
"Know it's always remained a two way road
For you've created smiles from afar
With your compassionate heart of pure gold"...
those were my favorite parts of your marvelous poem! the last line was one of my fave parts as well. in fact, i loved it all! outstanding, amazing piece! good luck in your contest! =D lolz!
-Peanut Butter Fudge
. Rewarded 8
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how sweet. this is honestly one of the best poems I've read on the site for a while. It's organized, well planned and the rhyming isn't forced. This is such an honest, emotional poem. Wonderful, splendid job. Whoever you wrote this for must be an amazing person.
. Rewarded 6
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Lovely write
This is such a wonderful write to your friend and it truly brings out the love so shared
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This is a lovely contribution to a sister and good friend. Hope she likes it a hole lot. Thanks for sharing this piece. UNT
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Excellent
A beautiful poem, very lyrically sound
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Absoutly beautiful
I've always enjoyed reading your writting. This peice is astounding. I can't say enough about how you write. Good luck with the contest!
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Beautiful dear brother~
awe this is so beautiful and such a lovely dedication ...smiles
Happy Anniversary Star~
May your wings always be free~
Many blessings
~A~
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Your heart and soul upon the page,
your "self" revealed in your love for others,
true Timothy inspired.
Softly, gently magical.
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Amen! Wonderful humbleness, transparency grattitude and hope. The 2nd stanza is espeacially meaningful and important for yourself and others to 'see'. Always a pleasure to read your words; you are surely blessed with a wonderful gift. We are never given more than we can bare.
"One step at a time, one foot in front of the other, and never in haste"....."Everything is a work in progress".
Joanne (Mbrace)
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stunning write...an amazing dedicatiom!
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well am beside myself here.
Actually honey, i am sorry I cant comment on this
right now.
Know I do love you and please. resend me the link
and i shall comment properly.
Loving you always
Victorious
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were is the tissue mushy!
didn't you know i would need some when came over to visit for poetry its beautiful
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great write this is very moving! it flows well. i really enjoyed reading this and i really hope you do well in the contest. keep on penning
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Very beautiful for a beautiful person.
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