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The Golden Tear

I'm off to war to kill some more
So don't shed your golden tears me for me
I'm sitting here and I hear the whispers of those I've killed

The war is my new hell, torture beyond insanity

 

So don't shed your golden tears over me

I've killed many, the bloodstains on my hands

I hear the screams of men all around me as they are mowed down

Covered in gore I scream in fear for the mind can't handle it

 

So don't shed your golden tears over me

I'm going insane, they are here for me

I sit there crying in the corner hoping that it all goes away

 

So don't shed your golden tears for me

My soul ripped to shreds screams for it to cease, but the orders come through

My heart aches as I stand in this living hell

We are there to kill, they told us it's for peace, what liars

 

So don't shed your golden tears for me

I don't deserve it, the pain must stop

We fought for peace and it was just a massacre

Covered in the blood of the innocent

 

So don't shed your golden tears for me

Author notes

OPTION 25::_
Soldier's Blood
Write from the P.O.V of a warrior that's had to kill. does he enjoy it hate it not care what?
Ltecho13

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  • JinSays gold member
    October 10

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    yes, I can see him saying this. I dont see fear on his face, I see regret, pain-mourning. I cannot begin to wonder what has become of him. This write is full of very real and heavy pain. thank you for taking the time to enter this contest, and I wish you all the best.
    love,
    jin


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 18, 2008

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    Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper

  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    September 27, 2008
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    Interesting line, golden tears.. great write. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Xmas16
    September 23, 2008

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    An amazing write to say the least mark. You're right. This is definitely my new favorite. Great job.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    man this is a

    tear jerker, we should give praise and shed tears as all soldiers give to our great country, thank you for this entry, good luck
    Linda


  • Mountainwhispers
    September 3, 2008
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    Wow this is so sad but so beautifully written.


  • reckless abandon
    September 3, 2008

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    "So don't shed your golden tears for me" It is completely amazing how you used that for the beginning of every stanza. There is so much put into the words of this poem, very powerful. Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Mistress Masquerade
    August 19, 2008

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    Wow. I am blown away by the images.. The emotions, just everything. This is a powerful write to say the least. You left me speechless.

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