oh what visions
lids closed
playing in the almost was
never quite there
mode
where all my wildest dreams
went dark
in the blink of an eye
where my heart resides
right behind those lids
that only open now
when prompted
by your words
whispered into my ears
Author notes
under 50 words prompt: blind
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A contest entry
- QUICKIE - 15 entries! prompt. by etoile.
300 points, ended August 26, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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if you add punctuation into this write it could flow so much better and sound a lot nicer.
however the take on the prompt was really well done
and i really liked all the images you put through.
i loved the last stanza.
thanks a lot for entering and goodluck
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