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hitch for higher ground

endless blue
uptight balloons
lead me to think
that it is the bigger picture
we must look for

unless the horizon
pulls up out back
and lets us hitch

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  • etoile
    August 22, 2008

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    i really enjoyed this. especially the first stanza
    but when i got to the second part i thought that the word 'hitch' was very awkward and not fitting at all with the rest of the poem.

    i loved the imagery in the first half, but the second kindof ruined it for me

    thanks for entering though and best of luck

  • Broken-Bones
    August 20, 2008

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    I loved the first stanza and it really engaged my mind and got mw thinking about the bigger picture that you described. I liked the idea of hitching on the horizon, a great image. Nice work x


  • aanika
    August 19, 2008

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    I think hitch is a weak word to end such a powerful poem on.
    other than that, I love this piece.
    'uptight balloons' is wonderful