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doors by definition

Missing image

she is a door
to the inside
all is in order

 

 

opaque and solid

 

hinges heavy

burdens dead 

bolted, secured

 

 

I am a glass door

to the outside
wide open

 

curtains billowing
like ballerinas

with the wind

inviting misled
dragonflies to dangle
with me, in spiderwebs

 

 

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 19, 2008

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    Humm..what a strong immgery you brouaght with in the boundaries of your life revealing the meaning and the impact of the situation of life over the muse of the poet..a great sketch you portrayd here..well done...


  • melphleg gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    Good metaphors and imagery as always, Michelle. I like the contrast. To me it seems being a glass door is better.


  • Endeavor gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Very Good


    Like the metaphores
    leading the reader to insite
    Interesting style for you
    Love the picture

    Rick

  • bluefeather
    August 27, 2008
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    Like this...

    "hinges heavy

    burdens dead

    bolted, secured"
    I understand this...good write.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 26, 2008
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    Lovely C


  • justgot2loveme
    August 23, 2008

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    I really love the picture
    many doors to open, very nice.
    Your poem is touching to me in many ways.
    I like how you say your a glass door
    I think I am to, my life is wide open.
    Sometime I wish I was a brick door.
    Very nicely written.
    I enjoyed a lot.
    Good luck in the contest.

    Justgot2loveme


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    The picture compliments the poem very well! I liked this one and the contrasting images of doors, as well as the details on the other side of your door that you've presented the reader with. Lovely poetry - I do think however that you don't need the bigger font as your words speak for themselves. Other than that, this is great poetry. Thank you for this entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • StarEyes
    August 19, 2008

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    Sis,

    What a read! This is fantastic! I love the images you created with the metaphors in this one..WOW!!! You certainly blew me away with this one!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    Nice metaphor usage and concise telling of self-discovery, preservation and even a bit of dark indulgence, at least that’s what I see anyway.


    All the best,
    With much love,
    mj.


  • crazymomma
    August 19, 2008

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    I really likd the metaphore and imagery in this. I can't wait to see it when it is finished. I am going to bookmark it so I can read it when done.


  • AlmostLover
    August 19, 2008
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    I like this alot! It's really creative. Good job.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    August 19, 2008

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    What a concept!

    The dialect of doors...this is very clever! Best of luck!


    Sue

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