A dancing fiction seduces the threads of my mind,
undulating consciousness twists untruths towards your
reality, the self-induced creativity of us.
Two years old dreaming echoes a past, fades, forms
a pattern of you as now. Maybe subconscious like a myth
we once sang, has painted your thoughts
so nothing alters the gaze you present. You grow
into my imagination, following the man I gave life to,
meaning blurs into acceptance and you are us.
Author notes
Strange how reality has grown into a fiction or fiction become our reality. This is an echo
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a good piece of poetry - the threads that sew imagination, they tighten and loosen as time goes by.
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job well done! this is a an awesome example of the twisted piece that makes up our reality...it isn't always a clear shot...thanks for sharing. keep up the great work...peace an dlight, kp
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Interesting perspective in this write. We paint our myths and they breathe life into us, a dance of reality and fantasy. I do not understand the last line, though. The first two lines seem a tad abstract, don't really provide the reader with a clear and concrete image, but I am intrigued by the ideas there, but where is the thread twisting? across what sort of ladscapes? Perhaos it is just one of those things which I don't get.
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Just beautiful!
This is inspired short poem shows where your heart and feelings lie! Your emotional statement is short, strong and captivating! I don't really get the title, of course -- but that's OK -- it raises a bit of curiosity, doesn't it? Your poem is very well constructed, has good flow / rhythm and is interesting and charming. I like it, a lot. It "signs" to me! What more can I say? Great work!
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I think that this write has depth that we cannot get into right from the start...I feel that the significance of every word has extreme power and gravity...this is a piece that should not be ignored and even though it is written with historic language or presence, it is something to be recognized...
Stephanie
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A wonderful musical flow to this piece . . . "Maybe subconscious like a myth we once sang" . . . a haunting line indeed!!!
Marc
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I've had to read this several times now. Each time I do, I find something I missed before. You always write with such meaning.
I'm afraid you're much too smart for me
Clappy dudes!
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Wonderful flow to this poem, and I love the thought/depth behind it. I am glad I got a chance to read it!
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Brilliant
This was a very good read for me. This is very intelligent and the word usage is astounding. I love how it reads, and the flow is amazing. Well done! -
I goofed forgot the body
forgot to put something down here line #6 is great
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What if the echo never answers?
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